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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Family Home (05/29/08)

TITLE: Moving On
By Ed VanDeMark
06/04/08


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Moving On

Thereís a new Mansion on Holy Lane in Heaven. Dad moved in five weeks ago. Itís not like you didnít know that he loved his porch swing Jesus but Iím sure Mom reminded you. The corners must be mitered perfectly and the doors must be painted, sanded and repainted until you can see your reflection. He loves to tinker in his shop, and sit at the kitchen table to do his bible study so I hop you took those into account. Dad is a saver, so you would do well if you add a few extra closets. If it isnít pushing it too much Lord Iíd suggest a big basement and an oversized attic too and a couple sheds.

What;s Dadís new address I want to send him a card to tell him I love him, he saves all of them but of course you know that. I want to keep him updated on how his great grand children are doing and send him school pictures every year. I know itís a tragedy when a child dies down here but if you have a few little ones up there I know a lap that is ready to be occupied.

Heís a traditionalist Jesus, he didnít change anything after Mom left for Heaven. Ten years is a long time to be vigilant down here. He wanted her to be comfortable as she looked down from her place in that great cloud of witnesses. You know you dust on Saturdays, Mom did it that way. You organize the re-cycles, it makes it easier for the guys who pick them up. We had to get rid of the old Chevy, it wasnít safe any longer. I hope he wonít mind if we put siding on the house, the paint doesnít hold up as long, especially on the east side.

If you have a vacant lot next to his place Lord Iím sure heíll mow it for you. Heís good with roses too and loves a huge garden, but donít expect him to eat the broccoli. If you can set up a deal with the M&M people or the Junior Mint folks heíd love that. Dadís good for several glasses of ice tea every day but youíll hear about it if you put sugar in it. He never traveled much but I suspect a side trip to some place that grows bananas would be appreciated, especially if bananas grow in a warm climate in heaven like they do down here.

Heís a special man Lord but his place just isnít home any more now that he and Mom are gone. We have the cherry drop leaf table in our living room. Mark got the rocker and when I get around to it Lisa will be putting the porch swing on her side porch so she can wave to folks as they drive by her house just like he did. Dan wanted the old desk chair, Iím not sure why but I suspect itís because Dad loved it. Markie wanted that antique dresser that was upstairs, and Cody wants his biblesÖall of them, at last count it was up to fourteen. Tony is getting the desk. He might be surprised because none of us ever knew what it looked like under all those requests for money that kept coming from ďWorld HungerĒ, and ďSave the ChildrenĒ, and ďBack to the BibleĒ, and Billy Graham and dozens of others. Oh yes and all of us took one of his hammers and one of Momís salt and pepper shakers.

Thanks for taking request Lord, Iím looking forward to visiting our family home one of these days.


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Jan Ackerson 06/05/08
I love the idea of this, and I really have a picture of what Dad was like by your descriptions of his idea heavenly mansion.

There are some errors in punctuation and a few typos--one more edit, especially for comma usage, might have been good.

This is a clever approach to this week's topic.
Sara Harricharan 06/09/08
What a neat story! I loved getting to know the dad this way. With the descriptions, etc, it was such fun! Especially with the M&M part...^_^
Helen Dowd 06/09/08
This story has a unique approach. It was enjoyable. But, if you don't mind a few tips, before you post this story anywhere else, check the spelling, the punctuation, etc. You will notice that in a couple of places, a question mark would have helped, and a few commas to mark off phrases, etc....But keep writing. We all make mistakes, and it is only when we help each other that our writing improves. God bless you...Helen
Beth LaBuff 06/14/08
I could almost hear this being read for an audio recording with a little music in the background. I love the prayer aspect of this heartwarming story. I especially enjoyed the lines about your Dad having a lap if there were kids that needed one. This was really nice to read.