The Official Writing Challenge
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06/05/08
I enjoyed each vignette into each home. Your words fit well with each scene like, "threatened into bed" and "meal commenced with a prayer." I'm glad you mention that "Patty is not without her own struggles." I like the contrast between the "cookie-cutter" homes and the lives of those living within. Your ending with the "maybe's" is creative and convicting. Nice work on this.
06/05/08
Good story and it definitely stresses that our greatest, most needy mission field is probably our on neighborhood.
06/05/08
Interesting approach--almost parable-like, as even in Christian homes there is sometimes strife and trouble. But as an allegory, it worked very well.