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06/05/08
Wonderful story. I especially loved these lines: "Home is where you are dry and safe, surrounded by those you love. As long as we’re in God’s hands, we’re home. We know that now."
06/05/08
Whew, some intense suspense there for sure! I liked the ending where she was glad it had passed by, but then realized what that meant and prayed for the folks it was headed to. Nice job. ^_^
06/06/08
I felt like I was right there with you, living it minute by minute. Great descriptions especially.
06/08/08
Okay, this freaked me out a little bit, having a daughter and son-in-law in Pinellas County! Great job with the suspense, and the ending was absolutely perfect!
06/08/08
Ooooh, very suspenseful. Well done.
06/08/08
Your word choices are excellent in this, "houses on our street mourn behind shuttered windows" and "Grey clouds thicken a dawn bereft of birdsong." I'd never thought of packing a utility bill but I can see the wisdom of doing so. I'm glad you were spared.
You built the suspense with much skill. I can't imagine the anxietly...Your second prayer touched me. Thanks for the reminder.
06/09/08
Great story and nicely done.
Whoa. I had to let out a deep breath after I finished reading this, because I didn't realize it, but I was holding my breath towards the end of it.

This story pulled me in and held on tight until the very end. I like how you inserted the updated hurricane report into your dialogue. That helped build added suspense.

I am happy that your home was spared, and I like how you got the reader thinking about those in Charlotte who were affected by the way you ended this.

What can I say? This piece had everything. Thank you for sharing this personal story of God's protection.