The Official Writing Challenge
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06/06/08
Connie is a wonderful character--I'd definitely like to read more about her. Consider expanding her role in a future story.

Note: "decapitated" means "head chopped off". I think you wanted "delapidated" which means "run down."

This was creative; I don't think there are many "Children's Home" entries this week.
06/06/08
Your story is heart-warming and I loved that the dreams of the two orphans were fulfilled. I like the compassion shown by Connie. I liked your take on this topic.