The Official Writing Challenge
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05/29/08
Awwww.. sweet. So cool that she found something her cousin liked and used it to build a relationship that ended up being so special.
05/29/08
What a touching story, and you wrote it extremely well. LOVE the ending.
05/30/08
Your very heart was in this piece. I could feel the warmth of the two cousins developing after the initial introduction and you carried it right through to the end, even ignoring the 'pesky boys'. Lovely story.
06/01/08
Oh! What a great story and I like how you intertwined another culture into the US culture using two young girls. Very nice. Awesome writing!
06/01/08
Great job, especially, with descriptions. Everything was very vivid, and your gradual development of the girls' friendship was done beautifully. Love the ending too.
06/01/08
Great job, especially, with descriptions. Everything was very vivid, and your gradual development of the girls' friendship was done beautifully. Love the ending too.
06/01/08
This was a delightful read! Nice work. I loved how the two girls, so very different, became close, each learning life lessons and forging memories with the other. Blessings, Cheri
06/02/08
This was wonderful! I loved the names, especially Kalpana. And how they were able to bond over something like Marbles. That was amazing, and so believeable, especially the ending. Really great writing! ^_^
I absolutely love the tender telling of this special relationship! Very easy to visualize. Congratulations on a worthy placing. Blessings, Angel