The Official Writing Challenge
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05/29/08
I can certainly see this playing out in real life. The dialouge is all very real and of course, the characters of the three cousins are absolutely adorable. I even like the grandma! ^_^ Nice job.
05/29/08
Very cool story... for some reason I was worried that the grandma was going to feed them turtle soup or something...LOL! A fun snapshot of cousins together.
Three darling little boys and a lesson learned make for a very interesting story.
Gramma is my kind of woman!
The dialog and the message are delightful.
Cute snapshot of cousins. I loved their interaction with the Grandma, too, and the lesson learned gently and naturally.
06/01/08
This is excellent. Great characterization through the use of dialogue and description. Love this line:
Three gloomy faces - each framed with wet blond hair - stare at the empty shell in unbelief. Mourning is a new experience.