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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Cousin(s) (05/22/08)

TITLE: Money's A Magnet, Didn't You Know?
By Marilyn Schnepp
05/26/08


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One minute I'm standing in line at the store,
And the next minute I'm lying on a concrete floor.
"She must have fainted," I hear someone say,
Then I pick myself up mumbling, "I'm okay."

I smile to myself as I look down at my hand
Still clutching the ticket to a million grand!
I'd been watching the Drawing on the store's TV,
And the numbers matched my ticket to a "T".

"I Won! I Won!" I shout aloud
As I show my ticket to a cheering crowd.
That night I Headline the Prime Time News
And get my first lesson in the "Family Tree Blues."

Just like the old lady who lived in a shoe,
I had so many cousins, I didn't know what to do!
I had wall-to-wall cousins claiming to be
Some long, lost cousin from the 'Ole Family Tree'.

Cousins by the dozens knocked on my door,
And most I didn't know, or ever heard of before.
"Lord, please help me, I'm being driven insane
By troubles and deception, and deep mental pain.

"This cousin nightmare, please make it cease,
And return to me solace, contentment and peace.
My riches have brought me nothing but grief,
And my sanity is deteriorating like a fallen leaf.

"Lord, take my money and those guests in my house,
And leave me as poor as the little church mouse.
I thank You in advance, Lord, for hearing me out...
And now I'll have peace, both within and without.

Amen...



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Beth LaBuff 05/29/08
Wonderful creativity-- coming from this angle. Your title makes sense after reading the poem and ending prayer. I love the phrases like "Family Tree Blues," "wall-to-wall cousins," and the reference to the "old lady who lived in a shoe." Nice work on this!
c clemons06/01/08
Good rhyme, good meter until the last stanza, work on that one and you'll have a winner!
Caitlynn Lowe06/04/08
I like it. The rhythm is pretty consistent and it flows well. Good job!
Sharlyn Guthrie 06/05/08
HeeHee! Very cute poem. Congratulations, Marilyn!
Marilyn Schnepp 06/05/08
Author's Note to Self:
#13 in Top forty.
Lollie Hofer06/06/08
What a fun poem to read. Congratulations! Very witty.
Betsy Markman06/06/08
A clever commentary on 1 Tim. 6:10. Well done.


   
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