The Official Writing Challenge
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05/29/08
Wow... heartrending. Loved this paragraph... So our voices rose to Him, there in the middle of the African plains. He was new to us, yet I felt somehow we were not new to Him, that He had been waiting for this time, waiting for us.
05/29/08
The story, the emotions, the descriptions are awesome in this piece. Masterfully done.
05/30/08
your article is very good at placing your reader in the scene. Keep up the good work.
05/31/08
Absolutely masterfully written. Your descriptions are rich and disturbing, and the dialog is incredible. Just excellent.
05/31/08
What a powerful entry. Wow! Its very thought- provoking. Lovely. Beautiful in spite of the devastation around them. Love this.
Laury
06/01/08
Your descriptions here put me in the midst of battle, even as I sat, safely at my computer. Such is the skill of a talented writer, to transpose us to another place, even when it's a place we don't prefer. You really strutted your stuff here. Great skills.
06/01/08
Powerful story! I felt like I was thee, observing the horror. Your ending was excellent and hopeful.
06/01/08
Wonderful title! Very poignant piece. Gripping. Awesome job, Cheri
06/01/08
Your descriptions are breath-taking and your story line is gripping. Wow. Your ending line was beautiful.
06/02/08
Such vivid, stiring descriptions of hate inspired madness let loose on a continent, and the damages it leaves in its wake. Great attention to the small details too.
06/02/08
This reads like a news report by an on-the-spot war correspondent. Close up and personal. I especially loved the last two paragraphs which were so full of hope. Well done Amy, superb job.
06/02/08
Beautiful, Amy, and your last sentence is fantastic!
06/03/08
I don't know how you do it, but every time you manage to pull me right into your stories. I was there at the scene of destruction, and I was escaping with the cousins.

I am glad that you gave the hope of God at the end. What more can I say? Masterful writing in every respect.
06/03/08
Your war aftermath scenes are definitely heart-rending and your title is perfect for this coursins story. The cousins' relationship is beautiful.
06/04/08
Beautifully written, and a powerful message besides. Very well done.
06/04/08
Wow, this was very intense, Amy. Excellent job. ^_^
06/05/08
You managed to convey both despair and hope. I loved this line and the message it conveys "He was new to us, yet I felt somehow we were not new to Him," Well done.
06/05/08
Congratulations on your EC! Nice job! Blessings, Cheri
06/05/08
Congratulations on your EC, Amy!
06/06/08
Congratulations on your well-served win. I enjoyed the flow of the words, several areas had a poetic feel to it in prose form.
06/06/08
Beautifully written! Way to go!