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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Cousin(s) (05/22/08)

TITLE: Elizabeth's Blessing
By Verna Cole Mitchell
05/26/08


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Elizabeth sat praising God
Beneath the olive tree
For blessing her with what had seemed
Impossibility.

She held her hands around her waist,
Where nestled close inside,
The child she’d longed for from the day
She’d first become a bride.

She pondered on the future of
The babe beneath her breast,
Not knowing he’d wear camels’ hair
And live in wilderness,

Nor that he’d live on locusts with
Wild honey from the bees,
And someday get a word from God
To warn the Pharisees.

She did not know before his birth
The witness that he’d bear,
When he’d tell people to repent,
The Lord’s path to prepare.

She surely was not cognizant
He’d baptize God’s own son
And see the Spirit, like a dove,
Descend on Holy One.

Yet when her cousin, Mary, came
To share her promised joy,
Her infant leapt inside her womb
For Mary’s Baby Boy.

This thought she savored in her heart
Great happiness to bring:
Her unborn promised son would be
The cousin of the King.


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Shirley McClay 05/29/08
Loved this line... This thought she savored in her heart
Great happiness to bring:
Her unborn promised son would be
The cousin of the King.

So many things we don't know about the future of our children.. yet she knew this and I am sure would have pondered what it meant to her own child... so cool!
Joanne Sher 05/31/08
Just lovely - with wonderful images and a beautiful portrayal of what Elizabeth probably thought. Truly enjoyed this piece!
Angie Phillips06/01/08
Although inspired by blessed cousins,your poem beautifully illustrates portrait of two biblical mothers even a modern mom can relate to.
Laury Hubrich 06/01/08
Oh Verna! I love this poem, well, actually, there aren't many of your poems I don't like:) but I really love this one! Wonderful writing! and I love your last line, too. Wow!
Sharlyn Guthrie06/01/08
Very nicely done. I like the brevity of it. It says it all in so few words.
Marilee Alvey06/01/08
Verna, I found you! I loved this poem. Of course, these happen to be the most famous cousins! I couldn't help but think that I'm glad God doesn't reveal everything to us. Imagine her protecting his little head, supporting it with love and care. I couldn't bare to imagine someone, one day, cutting it off. God in His wisdom, shared only encouragement for John's mother. I would have worried like a typical mother about John spending his days dressed in camel's hair. I would have hounded him to be a better student and worked at cross purposes with God. See how your poem inspires folks to think? Fantastic job!
Cheri Hardaway 06/01/08
Beautiful poem! Nice meter. Great job. Blessings, Cheri
Yvonne Blake 06/01/08
beautiful!!!! I've thought about what Elizabeth might have felt. You described it wonderfully.
Good job. Well done
LauraLee Shaw06/01/08
this is a blessing to read. Loved the flow and the approach to the topic. Your ending tied the story with a hope-colored bow.
Beth LaBuff 06/02/08
Excellent work on this! I like that you brought out Elizabeth's ponderings (which she must have had with the miracles accompanying her giving birth to John -- especially "the child she'd longed for…She'd first become a bride," "the camel's hair, locust, and wilderness," and then the most amazing event "He'd baptize God's own Son." I love this.
Lyn Churchyard06/02/08
This flowed like cream over apple pie. Wonderful poem; terrific metre. Super job Verna.
Jan Ackerson 06/02/08
This would be a great reading for a Sunday during Advent. Well done!
Joshua Janoski06/02/08
Loved the rhythm of this and how it fit so well with what we know about John the Baptist from the Bible. Great writing!
Lollie Hofer 06/02/08
I am sooooooooooooo jealous (but in a good way if that's possible). I tried to write something about Elizabeth and Mary (or John and Jesus) but couldn't come with an angle. What a beautiful poem about an incredible family. Your rhythm was perfect, the pace just right, the rhymes lovely and the words elegant. Simply wonderful!
Jan Ackerson 06/04/08
Hey, here's that poem that's got lots of enjambment! Pop on over to that thread and leave a link there, too, okay? Nice job!
Dianne Janak06/04/08
Loved this Verna... you always inspire me with your poetry. You know a master at anything when they make it look so natural and easy. We all know it's a gift and you have it! Made me see the old story with fresh new eyes.. thanks so much.. Dianne
Debbie Wistrom06/04/08
Incredible. Creative and endearing take on the topic.
I was blessed by your insight.
Thanks!
Betty Castleberry06/04/08
Verna, I love this. It's so well done, and every time I think about the baby leaping in the womb, it gives me chills. Thumbs up.
Loren T. Lowery06/04/08
Beautiful words wonerfully arranged to tell a beautiful story more wonderous still. Loved the way everything unfolded here, just as it was meant to be!
Sara Harricharan 06/04/08
Yup, Elizabeth's blessing indeed! I liked this, especially to see it sort like from her own POV. It was great! ^_^
LaNaye Perkins06/04/08
This poem was so good, it literally sang in my mind as I read. Well done!
Pam Carlson-Hetland06/04/08
Absolutely lovely poem, Verna.
Dee Yoder 06/04/08
Well, Verna, I had it in my head that I'd already commented on your poem! Imagine my surprise when I glanced over the yellow boxes and didn't see my name-LOL!

I love this poem. I love the imagery of your words. I love the way you bring out the thoughts of Elizabeth, who, like any new mom, dreams about the future of her son. This poem is so gentle and good.
Mariane Holbrook06/04/08
This is definitely your genre! Beautifully crafted with all the right things in place for a truly memorable poem. Kudos!
Joy Faire Stewart06/04/08
I loved it! Beautifully written.
Aaron Morrow06/05/08
Simple wonderful Verna, what great storytelling and poetry combined!