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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Cousin(s) (05/22/08)

By Karen Sunderland


When my sister Linda and I were nearly teenagers, we spent part of a summer with Aunt Betty and Uncle Jake. Aunt Betty assigned the two of us a duty: to walk to the post office each weekday and pick up the mail. The walk to the post office included an uphill climb at its start and a downhill skip at its end. Furthermore, Aunt Betty sometimes let us push our 2-year-old-cousin, Peter, in his stroller to and back from the post office. He usually enjoyed these rides greatly.

One lovely day, Linda and I asked Aunt Betty if we could take Peter to the post office with us, and she agreed. We were on our way up the hill - but not our favorite part of the stroller trip. However, we looked forward to going downhill with Peter, and on that day we were itching to have some fun.

As we strolled back from the post office toward the hill; we pushed Peter out in front of us and then ran and caught the handle of his stroller. He rather enjoyed this game that day; so we continued pushing him ahead a little harder with each push and running a little faster to catch him. With high expectations, we pushed our way to the hill that would help us zoom the laughing boy way ahead of us. And yes - we gave Peter's stroller a Herculean push down that hill.

Peter, totally out of control, rolled so fast that we couldn't catch up to him before his stroller reached the bottom of the hill, turned off the road, and sped down the high off-grade into the ditch. We held our breath as we watched our dear little cousin speed down the off-grade and into the ditch, until he stopped - - - - upright. What a relief! Moreover, we were really nice to the nervous Peter, as we slowly and carefully rolled him back to the house.

When Aunt Betty appeared, Peter began to tell her about his adventure - but only the very beginning. You see, Peter was a friendly little guy who liked to talk; but when he got excited, he flapped his little tongue so fast that no one could understand a word he tried to communicate. Added to this, it would take some time for Aunt Betty to slow him down enough, so that she could understand what he was trying to tell her - and at that time, she was in the middle of something. Oh yes - the two 'helpers' breathed a sigh of relief.

That evening, Aunt Marge and Uncle John invited all of us to supper. As my aunts and uncles sat chatting after supper, Peter began to recount his trip to the post office that day. Linda and I quietly listened as Peter reported the onset of his unforgettable ride. However, his little two-year-old-mouth soon flipped onto super-speed and raced so fast that no one could understand a word of his report from that point on - and we two cousins were inconspicuously relieved. Still though, Aunt Betty and Uncle Jake took a considerable amount of time that evening to help the distressed Peter slow down, but he couldn't; he was too excited. When Aunt Betty and Uncle Jake finally rejoined the chat with Aunt Marge and Uncle John, we two cousins mentally vowed to never do such a thing - again!

Yes, we were saved by Peter's excitement - and we did learn something. However, about twelve years later, after some more sport that turned sour; I was saved by God's Grace - and not by luck. While I'll never forget my near call with being caught by my aunt and uncle; God's Grace has made a far more wonderful and deeper etching in my thankful mind.

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Beth LaBuff 05/29/08
Ah… a real-life cousin episode. I could see this happening and feel the relief of the cousins that Peter was okay. It sounds like a lesson was learned that day. I'd be interested to know if Peter remembers this? :) I enjoyed your story. Nice work.
Shirley McClay 05/29/08
OHHHH... scary! My husband does this and it always give my heart a flutter. So glad it ended up safe!
c clemons05/30/08
Good story, not sure of the title, (there's no such thing as luck). There were too many repetitions with the cousins being relieved, maybe a different way of describing their relief would make it flow better. Last paragraph was confusing a little rework would help that alot.