The Official Writing Challenge
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05/29/08
Ah… a real-life cousin episode. I could see this happening and feel the relief of the cousins that Peter was okay. It sounds like a lesson was learned that day. I'd be interested to know if Peter remembers this? :) I enjoyed your story. Nice work.
05/29/08
OHHHH... scary! My husband does this and it always give my heart a flutter. So glad it ended up safe!
05/30/08
Good story, not sure of the title, (there's no such thing as luck). There were too many repetitions with the cousins being relieved, maybe a different way of describing their relief would make it flow better. Last paragraph was confusing a little rework would help that alot.