The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh!!!! What a title!
LOVED THIS!
POV is wonderful, so glad he got fed!
05/22/08
This was very clever. I love the opening paragraph. I kept reading to find out what in the world the critter was. At first I thought a fish, but that was quickly ruled out. Love the line about "flaunting my glorious body"! Great job. Blessings, Teri
Very cute and creative. You are good girl!
05/22/08
What a title! The descriptions of the turtle are great too, especially about the long neck. I think the article would have had broader appeal if instead of mentioning a Challenge entry, you simply said 'Going to write a short story about me.'
Hmmm, my word checker said 626 words. Where's that extra one hiding...in the turtle's shell?
05/23/08
SO cute, clever, and creative. I LOVE the voice (and think I recognize it!:D) - and what a title. Fun!
"I take great pride in this neck. It is just so ummmÖ prehistoric."

LOL! That line and a dozen others made me laugh out loud. This is hilarious! It's all about a turtle saying funny stuff, and the person feeding it is you.

Oh, and the title is the best part about it. This story rocks! :)
05/23/08
Ok...since everyone is picking favorite lines, here is min:
Iíve been ever so lonely in here by myself. A good love story would be just what the vet ordered!

Nice take on the topic. ; )

Okay, I loved the hilarious voice. A fun entry, for sure! Well done.
05/26/08
A great voice, wonderfully self-absorbed. And a great tease as to the creatureís identity
05/26/08
You truly belong in Masters, Laury! Excellent. You excelled once again!
05/26/08
This was a blast to read! Oh, and I LOVE the title. Hee hee. "Masterfully" written, my dear!
Sooo creative and love the humor and the voice.
05/27/08
Oh my...poor turtle, so misunderstood and lonely. Leave it to you, my Friend, to find inspiration in a turtle! Funny and cute. You made me laugh!
05/27/08
Hey, Laury, great minds...I wrote about a turtle, too.

This was very cute--who knows what goes on in a turtle's teeny brain, huh?

FYI--you wanted "faze", not "phase."

Great first entry in Masters! I loved the voice, the character and personality of the turtle was very clear through the voice!
05/27/08
I thought he was a fish too at first, except a fish doesn't have a neck. How clever and funny. Good job!!
I was just taking a break from homework to read an story that caught my eye. Didn't know it was yours, Auntie, until I saw your name in some comments. :-) Very fun story! I had fun figuring out what kind of animal it was, too. There were a few spots that felt a little stilted, but overall a delightful story.
I LOVE this MC. He's a hoot. This was a well written and entertaining read.
05/28/08
CRACKED up over this! You are way too clever for any amount of stupid words!
05/28/08
ROFL! Love your title! I'm still laughing from this, the cute, clever remarks fit the tone and voice just right and the ending was simply perfect! ^_^
05/28/08
Not sure about the title, but it did draw me in! The POV was unique. The whole time I was reading, I was thinking "Is this a turtle talking?" Very creative. Lots of turtle stories this week! [And the joke's on me if a Red Slider isn't a turtle! =)] Blessings, Cheri
What a funny, funny story! And always told well by you!
This was really cute and I loved the POV. Well done!
Now, this is creative. A story from a turtles POV. Sounds as thought Mr T has a bit of an attitude problem. Some wonderfully witty lines in this, well done. I just love the title, but it's a lie I'm afraid; not stupid at all. Very well done in fact.