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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Family Pet (05/15/08)

TITLE: With Your Appetite for Pie...
By Sally Hanan
05/18/08


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Hi Betsy,

Itís Rufus, your dog that moved on.
Iím here, up in heaven, with Jesus and John.
Iím sure itís surprising to learn of my fate,
but it doubtless will help your emotional state.

Deep down, yes, you hope it; pets walk through these gates,
Balaamís ass, Davidís lamb, (someoneís monkey of late);
my puppy dog eyes, her cauliflower ears,
the fat ham on legs, all are welcome here.

I heard you while dying, my fur in your tears,
I heard you two talkingóyou and Pastor Beer.
You said thereís no heaven, no leafy green glades
where purebreds like me can rest in the shade.

You said weíve no soul, so how can we be
in some place so goodly, so glorious and free?
I beg, Maíam, to differ. Your logic is skewed;
some darn theologian should have it reviewed.

The Bible says lion and lamb shall be kind
and lie down togetheróno dinner in mind.
It says: all flesh will see salvation of Him;
it says that my future does not look so grim.

Iíve found that quite true--Iím having a ball--
I jump and I catch and I run and I crawl.
Iíve found one and all to be full libertarian--
as such weíve all become staunch vegetarians.

I play with the kids; I roll in the forests;
I dig nice deep holes; I bark with the chorus.
Every hour thereís a treat or a walk in third gear,
and, dare I confess it? Iím happier here.

So cheer up dear Betsy, weíll meet by and by,
(real soonís what I figureÖwith your appetite for pie...).
Itís lovely up hereóso peaceful, such bliss.

Hasta luego, dear Betsy,

And sealed,
with a kiss.
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Joanne Sher 05/22/08
Oh - just delightful! Love the end especially. Great stuff!
Lynda Lee Schab 05/23/08
Too fun! And I love the title - the perfect choice. Loved that line in the poem! Clever and creative entry this week.
Laury Hubrich 05/24/08
Loved this! Too funny. Excellent job:)
Laury
Betty Castleberry05/24/08
I plan to greet all my pets in heaven. This was very encouraging and a fun read, too.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/24/08
Finally, a firm answer to a great theological question--great job with this.
Dee Yoder 05/25/08
Cute and comforting! I like to think of my pets frolicking along with the angels and such! Good word pictures scattered through the whole poem.
Gregory Kane05/26/08
Sweet, humorous and daring.
But were it really true, what would we do with the billions upon trillions of resurrected cockroaches? And the spiders? And I really donít want to think about the mosquitoes! Does anyone out there keep skunks as a pet?
Jan Ackerson 05/27/08
Sally, this is one of the cleverest I've read this week. I love how you made the salutation and closing work with the meter of your poem--and even though I tend to disagree, theologically speaking, I give this one 5 stars! Love it! Oh yes, the line that inspired the title made me snort out loud.
Marita Vandertogt05/27/08
I hope this is true... I would love to think all the pets that have passed my way are lounging in leafy green places and waiting.
This is excellent... loved it!
Debbie Wistrom05/27/08
One of my favorites this week.
Thanks for the fun!
Joshua Janoski05/29/08
I loved the message of this. I would like to think that our pets will join us in Heaven. The rhymes were great, and you can't beat the title. :)

Delightful read. I appreciate you sharing this.
Joshua Janoski05/29/08
Congratulations on taking 8th place in your level with this piece, Sally!
Joshua Janoski05/29/08
And you placed 11th overall. Awesome!