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05/15/08
This was a very interesting story, in spite of the computer transference problems.
05/15/08
I like the son-in-law side of the story.

Great angle and great story.

Loved the early descriptions of Rosie.
05/16/08
This must have been fun to research - sounds like a fascinating woman, and you've done her, and the other characters, justice here. Very vivid.
05/17/08
I laughed at this line: more men attached to her harness than I had dollars in the bank
05/19/08
You sure covered a lot of ground in this entry. Pretty ambitious. Overall, it works well, but I have to question this line:

- "and tossed a dusky chestnut mane"

I had to re-read the opening a few times trying to figure out if Rosie was a woman or a horse. If this is referring to Rosie the human, I would definitely give it the axe. It's so overdone, it's burnt, lol. That, and the line that had "rosy" and "Rosie" so close together, I would change, but other than that, it's a good piece, and I'd call it a successful entry as well. Aside from the punctuation problem, but what can you do...computers are wonky sometimes. Thanks for posting it.
05/19/08
How creative and courageous of you to write in the historical fiction genre for this topic. I always enjoy stories like this, and yours is great!
05/19/08
I loved the son-in-law's voice and point of view. This is a very interesting story and the descriptions are great!
05/20/08
Very different but enjoyable story. You had the Sheriff's voice down perfectly. I love this type of story, reality woven with fiction. well done!