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05/15/08
This is truly poignant, a masterfully written story of Christian forgiveness.
05/16/08
Very descriptive, with excellent use of dialog. I love the flashbacks and such - masterfully done.
05/16/08
Loved the use of flashbacks, and how there was such a change of heart. Forgiveness is powerful, and the world needs to see it in us. Great writing...
05/16/08
I love the humility the daughter in law has.

Great title!
05/16/08
You did well with describing the culture and how important honoring one's parents and in-laws are. Good portrayal of family devotion and forgiveness.
05/17/08
I love how you bring this around in a circle from beginning to end without pounding in the point. You let the reader think about what's happened as you tell the story. The characters felt real. Excellent story.
05/17/08
An exceptional story with great truths and excellent character building.
05/18/08
Incredible. Two messages in one well-written package--all while being perfectly on topic. Just incredible.
05/18/08
I really like how you wove the fabric of this story together. You kept my interest from the title to the last sentence. Well done my friend.
05/18/08
Masterfully written, as always! I get an education every time I read one of your stories.
05/18/08
Excellent. I'm glad you left the mother-in-law who she was and didn't force her to change at the end. You left the stage wide open for her eyes to gradually open as her D-I-L cares for her. Very nicely done. I must admit, all of the foreign words and references made the reading a bit rough, but it's not really an issue, since I'm not sure they could be removed or adjusted in any way without ruining a lot of what you were trying to accomplish with the piece. All in all, it's very good, and I'm glad I read it.
05/19/08
While I was reading this, I could see it running in my head as a play. I think it would make a great one! Nicely done and great message.
05/20/08
Your knowledge of Japanese culture is outstanding, and it really makes this story believable in every way. Superb story! Thank you so much for sharing.
05/21/08
Peter, your fan club is growing by leaps and bounds. Everything you write is such a keeper, and this is is no exception. "Brilliant" doesn't adequately describe your work. I'll have to think of something else. Big time kudos!
05/21/08
The descriptions, the use of language and flashbacks...it all makes for a beautiful story.
05/21/08
The MC is so beautifully portrayed in the Japanese setting. So much love and warmth in this story. Another delightful read Peter... as usual.
05/21/08
I felt so bad for Rinako, the way her MIL just seemed to look right through her. This was well done, the emotions and the dialog with the italics. Great job. ^_^
05/22/08
Congratulations on the EC! You are well deserving of it.
05/22/08
A very unique perspective on the subject, and quite enjoyable to read.
05/22/08
Congratulations, Peter!!!! Sooo happy for you each and every time you earn an EC!!!
05/22/08
Another well-told story Peter. They just get better and better.
05/22/08
I could tell this was well-researched and you also did a wonderful job portraying the common ground true Christians stand on, no matter their background and culture.
05/23/08
Congratulations on your EC, Peter. This is absolutely incredible. Beautiful writing. Great cultural lesson. Excellent.