The Official Writing Challenge
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05/08/08
Pandora's box indeed. I guessed at a twist like this coming, but I didn't see it ending as neatly as it did. I felt sorry for Shannon just a bit, but I was glad that she did her best to be a sister sort of mother for her. Good job, I liked how you put us right in the shoes of the MC. ^_^
05/08/08
Although a common theme, you elevated the article to another level with the wonderful conclusion, especially "The dust particles continue their dance as God whispers in my heart, I Am your Father, you are my daughter and Shannon remains forever your sister, in Christ."
05/09/08
This brought tears to my eyes - so moving, and extremely well-told. Masterfully told.
This is a masterful story. I love the way you paved the way for the truth to come out with the words, "God never makes mistakes."
05/15/08
Oh! I loved this story. I totally did NOT see where you were headed with it! Congratulations on getting an EC! 4th place!!! woohoo!!!
Laury
05/15/08
Congratulations on your EC. You are a very good storyteller--building the suspense. Nice job with the topic.
05/21/08
Excellent writing. I really liked the story.
Wow, wonderful story. I felt like you ran out of room to really end the story, but the rest of it was powerful.