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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sibling(s) (05/01/08)

TITLE: By Moonlight's Lamp
By Henry Clemmons
05/07/08


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My Kidney
aches
in lonely whispers
under sterile
white bed sheets.

I pray,
I pray,
I pray.

By moonlight’s lamp,
through undraped window,
doomed gazes
from blackened faces
hauntingly stare.

Glances of flashes
from
tear filled eyes
swirl from twisters
in
spinning dank darkness.

I pray,
I pray,
I pray.

I see his feet, bare, white.
His hands, calloused, strong.
His eyes tired, but focused firm.

My brother
My hero.

My kidney
aches
in lonely
whispers
under sterile
white bed sheets.

I pray,
I pray,
I pray.

By moonlight’s lamp,
through undraped window,
huts of windblown grasses
stifle moans of final breaths,
gasping,
grabbing
for my brothers
hand,
his voice,
his heart,
God’s gospel,
my kidney.

Tubes of
plastic
bottled air
and filtered blood
hum in my ear,
but my heart
hears
the fresh breaths
of Africans
young
Christians
new.

And,
I pray,
I pray,
I pray.

My kidney aches,
in lonely whispers,
under sterile
white bed sheets.

In moonlight’s lamp,
through undraped window,
I died,
yet lived.


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Jan Ackerson 05/08/08
Stunningly beautiful--the imagery, your word choices rich with assonance, your use of repetition--all these combine to make a poem deep with love and grace. Wowsers.
Emily Gibson05/09/08
Powerful images and word repetition-I'm anxious to know more about the back story on this one.
LauraLee Shaw05/10/08
This is powerful, and it grabbed my attention and kept running with it. Brilliant.
Debbie Wistrom05/12/08
To live again as a organ donor, am I right?
Your mood is dark and then refreshing.
Lyn Churchyard05/13/08
Amazing! The flow of words, the flow of thoughts all combine in love and sadness. Superbly done.
Joshua Janoski05/13/08
Such power in so few words. I appreciate you sharing this.
Beckie Stewart05/14/08
I don't get poetry for the most part, but got this one. Great job.
Mariane Holbrook05/14/08
This is a stunning piece of work! I reread it so I wouldn't miss a single nuance. Very well done indeed!
Sara Harricharan 05/14/08
WOW! This is one of your best yet, I loved the repeating lines of "I Pray" that made it so real and especially the description of the Kidney, alone and everything. Just wonderful writing! ^_^
Joanne Sher 05/14/08
Masterfully done - and so, so moving. Just excellent.