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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sibling(s) (05/01/08)

TITLE: The Crybaby and the Dimwit
By Sheri Gordon
05/07/08


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Curtain. The stage is empty except for two extra- large, white beanbag chairs. Two Males, dressed in white sweat pants and white t-shirts, are tussling on the beanbags. Male 1 has curly red hair—Male 2 is bald. Thick ropes are tied around each Male’s waist, with one end left long—about 4 feet of extra rope.


Male 2: Stop it! If you don’t knock it off, I’m telling Mom.

Male 2 grabs his rope and pulls away from the entanglement with Male 1. Both stand and continue to scuffle.

Male 1: You’re such a crybaby.

Male 2: Am not.

Male 1: Are too.

Male 1 shoves Male 2, then starts doing push-ups.

Male 1: Besides, how’re you gonna tell? We’re in here, and Mom’s out there, remember?

Male 2: Duh. I’ll tell her when we get out. She said we better be coming out soon, or she’s gonna pop.

Male 1 stops the push-ups—begins flexing/admiring his muscles.

Male 1: And just how do you think we’re getting out of here? I don’t see any openings. Besides, I kinda like it here. Plenty to eat, nice place to sleep. If I could just get rid of you, (Male 1 pushes Male 2) everything’d be perfect.

Male 1 reclines on the beanbags, folding his arms behind his head.

Male 2: Maybe if you weren’t such a dimwit and so busy admiring yourself, you’d learn something by listening to Mom. She and another lady were talking about it almost being ‘her time.’ They said we hafta go down some canal. The other lady said it’s gonna hurt, but Mom says she’s excited to finally get to see us.

Male 1 jumps up and begins air- punching like a fighter.

Male 1: I’m not afraid of a little pain. Bring it on—I’ll take whatever they throw at me.

Male 2: Not us being hurt you dimwit—Mom’s gonna be hurt.

Male 2 rolls his eyes exaggeratedly. Male 1 continues air-punching.

Male 2: So what do you think it’s gonna be like out there? It sounds a little scary.

Male 1 stops punching, shakes his head in disgust, and rolls his eyes exaggeratedly.

Male 1: You’re such a wimp. If we are really leaving, and if we are really going through some canal, I’m sure it’ll be a wild ride. (mimics riding on a surfboard)

Male 1: Maybe they’ll be other people like us to hang out with. Maybe someone I can wrestle with, who won’t be such a crybaby.

Male 1 puts Male 2 in a headlock.

Male 1: Say it.

Male 2: Uncle.

Male 1: Louder.

Male 2: UNCLE.

Male 1 releases Male 2 and begins swinging his own rope and whistling.

Male 2: (rubbing neck) I don’t know…it seems pretty rough out there. There’s lots of angry voices and loud noises…and something called ‘smelly animals.’ I wonder what that’s all about.

Male 1: Couldn’t be any smellier than you after Mom’s eaten spicy venison stew.

Male 1 fans his hand in front of his face, then starts admiring his muscles again.

Male 2: And we don’t know anything about Dad. He never talks to Mom—what if he doesn’t talk to us, either? What if he doesn’t even like us?

Male 1: Chillax. If Dad doesn’t like you, you can always tag along with Mommy. You already act like a mama’s boy, anyway.

Male 1 roughly musses Male 2’s hair, then yanks his rope.

Male 1: Besides, I’m gonna be Dad’s ‘tough little man.’ He won’t even care about you. (flexing his muscles)

Both Males start flailing about the stage and looking around, as if some force is rocking the stage.


Male 2: What’s going on?

Male 1: Beats me. Hey, it looks like there’s a light over there. Maybe that’s the canal. I’m going to go check it out.

Male 1 starts moving toward the side of the stage, as the “rocking” continues.

Male 2: No, let me go first. I’m the one who told you about the canal in the first place.

Male 2 weasels his way in front of Male 1.

Male 1: No way, little bro. I’m bigger—get outta my way.

Male 1 shoves Male 2 behind him.

Male 2: You may beat me down the canal, but I’ll get back at you one day. That’s a promise.

As Male 1 simulates diving off stage, Male 2 grabs his foot and follows.

Curtain.

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To learn more about the lives of Jacob and Esau, read Genesis 25:19--36:43.



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Sara Harricharan 05/08/08
ROFL! Okay, this is simply too funny! I didn't even think for a minute that this could be blibical until the near end where he said he was a "Mama's boy" the whole ego part with doing push-ups and the usual rough housing made me have to laugh at this. Especially at the "uncle". Great job with putting old characters into a completely different and new light! Your talent shines wonderfully here! ^_^
Jan Ackerson 05/08/08
Absolutely the best play/skit I've read on this site! Clever, funny, very easy to visualize, and it's also very do-able as a real skit. I'd love to see it done. The ending is outstanding--this is a super-strong entry!
Joanne Sher 05/09/08
Oh SO clever! A complete delight, and I had NO clue this would be Biblical - but of course, now I can completely see it! This must have been a blast to write - it sure was to read!
Betty Castleberry05/10/08
What a fun read. I love how you managed to get some Bible characters in it, too. Thumbs up for this very creative piece.
Debbie Wistrom05/10/08
Great title. I started wondering about thier identities when you wrote about the "smelly animals".

Loved the tussleing that went on before the wild ride.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/12/08
Delightfully creative and so much fun to read.
Peter Stone05/13/08
I'd love to see this skit acted out on stage by young twin brothers.
Dee Yoder 05/14/08
Wow-it all started in the womb! Very visual and descriptive and a most unique retelling of this Biblical duo. Clever, clever, clever!
Lyn Churchyard05/14/08
The title totally dragged me in. This was so good, so very good. I'd love to see it performed as a skit. What a hoot!!
LauraLee Shaw05/14/08
Oh, I'm clapping in praise! WEll done! Love it, especially the ending!!!! With the right actors, this would be an incredible sermon opener--for adults and youths. Love your title too! ;)
LauraLee Shaw05/15/08
Congrats on your EC, Sheri! This was soooo terrific!!!!