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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sibling(s) (05/01/08)

TITLE: Doors
By Sharlyn Guthrie
05/06/08


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I reminisce
and in the midst
of all that shimmers
are sisters
giddy, giggling
mischievous mimickers
silly, secretive
sometimes including me
innocent little girl
invited in the side door
simply since Iím
their sister

Kindred spirits
linked by
lineage, image,
preference
swapping shirts
friends
pieces of pizza
quibbling incessantly
slamming
bedroom doors
indignantly
on sisters

Time ticks
sand sifts
shifting roles
dismantling, distancing
stretching, merging
through revolving doors
molding us into
older versions of ourselves
obvious mirror images
of anotheróour mother
like it
or not

Three cognate
Women waltzed
before me
demonstrated
courageous choices
causes, consequences
failed sometimes
opened doors
to opportunities
offered counsel
solicited
or not.

Older
bolder
innocence overcome
louder laughter
and lament
profound Providenceó
doors closed
that needed closing
stronger bond
forged with another
ready
or not

Mother said
sisters stick together
I wish it were
as true for one
as for three
some secrets
construct
impervious walls
void of doors
-those oughtnít be
whispered even
to sisters

One sticks
closer than sisters
knows sorrow
greater than ours
offers, inspires
empowers, forgives
ignites hearts buried
in stone walls
opens Himself -the door-
willing to restore
once more
as sisters


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Joanne Sher 05/09/08
Wonderful, WONDERFUL use of the sound repetition devices - made this flow just right. A wonderful message as well - especially the last stanza, of course.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/10/08
Awesome poetry. I loved the story and the message revealed through the lines.
Betty Castleberry05/12/08
This really touched me. I am one of three sisters, and you captured the stages of life so well in this. Kudos.
Glynis Becker 05/12/08
Lovely poem. I have one sister and can definitely see the progress through each of these stages for us as well. Beautiful.
Jan Ackerson 05/12/08
Oh, wow! This is such a great example of free verse that is so much more than just "artfully arranged prose." You use so many wonderful poetic tools, and ALSO have a poem rich in feeling. VERY good.
Tessy Fuller05/12/08
This was great - my fav line was
"obvious mirror images
of anotheróour mother
like it
or not"
I loved the way it flowed and was knit together by certain phrases repeated. I also like the use of doors as they walk through different areas of their lives. Nicely done.
Yvonne Blake 05/12/08
Wow! Interesting freeform, but yet a "dance" of sounds. I loved this stanza, its choice of words and sounds. There's a hint of story within it.

Older
bolder
innocence overcome
louder laughter
and lament
profound Providenceó
doors closed
that needed closing
stronger bond
forged with another
ready
or not
Beth LaBuff 05/13/08
The words your use are so descriptive and powerful. I think you are a free-verse master. This is wonderful.
Debbie Wistrom05/14/08
Loved the progression and the theme.

Very talened and creative entry.
Sara Harricharan 05/14/08
I loved the first line! It just seems so perfect! The images and the descriptions are great! ^_^
Mariane Holbrook05/14/08
You are a master of descriptive phrases, no kidding. I love the progression of this poem and the freedom that doing it free verse gave you. Kudos!
Dianne Janak05/19/08
So happy to find this. I had a sister and raised three girls who are now finding each other as they blossom into young women. This tells their story. Loved the way they turn out like MOM.. like it or not... made me laugh.. but loved loved loved the last verse..
This is a keeper for my favorites..