The Official Writing Challenge
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05/09/08
As a person who really HATES to be left waiting, I could really relate to the sister's frustration with Bethany.

Something to clarify, though, if you decide to do anything more with this--why didn't Bethany just tell Jenny, the very first time, that she wanted to wait with Sam?

Sweet story.
05/10/08
This tugged at my heart strings. Big sister probably loved her little sister even more after seeing her heart as caring instead of selfish.
05/10/08
Am I a big baby or do I just weep easily? Whatever! Near the end of this story tears just popped right out of my eyes and dimmed my view. Great read, interesting and well written, and made a very important Point! Very Good! Kudos!