The Official Writing Challenge
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05/08/08
I love how you set the scene here, and how in the end they truly were great friends. Very well written.
05/08/08
Awwww, I loved this, fact or fiction is is wonderful. This line says exactly what it meant, perfect."took on hues and texture it was never meant to have"

If true, I bet you could do a book of short stories. You are blessed, either way.
05/10/08
I had to make a face at your descriptive writing with the"oddly incongruous spices and liquids until the pickle juice took on hues…" You have brother and sister relationships down pat. :) This was very entertaining to read.