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"Mommy says I eat like a horse, but I think she means a pony."

Loved that line. It made me laugh. :)

The child's voice in this story is perfect. It's exactly how I would expect a little kid to talk. I could picture the child standing in front of me, wide eyed, telling me everything.

Great job with this one. I can tell that you have a lot of experience with children that I'm sure helped you when crafting this piece.
I enjoyed the child's voice and all that was happening in the story.
05/02/08
This is so precious! I wish my kids could say the same thing about me, but they most certainly cannot. ;)

This was my favorite line: We all sit under the tent and readÖ and Mommy melts M&Mís on the dryer vent. (We really like M&Mís ... oh, and tents too!) Too precious!

I would've enjoyed a more creative title, maybe even the just the improved phrasing of your last line: My FAvoritest Favorite. I dunno...just a thought. ;)
05/05/08
You definately nailed the voice of a child, and I LOVED the visual of her playing in a giant mud puddle, then getting hosed down! LOL
Good stuff.
05/05/08
This was the perfect way to tell us abot your mom without being stiff or predictable. Great job.
Shirley, what a precious memoir! You made me feel like I was right there on the farm with you.
The only thing that troubled me was the single use of past tense.
"She taught me to read when I was only four."
Perhaps?
I'm only four and she's teaching me to read.
Thank you for sharing these treasured memories.
05/06/08
Superb job on the voice of this piece. You were spot on.
I loved all her favorites.

Creative and engaging. Fresh and so much alive.

Great job!
05/06/08
Excellent job with the voice - and an absolutely delightful piece with wonderfully poignant bits. Just lovely.
What a wonderful blessing to have a mother like that. And what a role model!! And with the young child's voice you paint a refreshingly simple picture.
This was cute. I love it. I think I saw one spelling error on "whiskers", but this was simply delightful to read in the voice and it sounds like you had a wonderful time growing up and you described it all so well. I felt was there.
05/07/08
Awww! What a lovely story! I loved the last line with the "My mommy is the favoritest.." lol. That was cute and just what a kid would say. This made me think back to the little house on the prarie books, the descriptions and especially the POV made this very fun! Nice job! ^_^
I entered the heart and mind of a child reading this precious piece. It is at once both beautiful and poignant, brining back some great memories of my own.
05/08/08
I love this glimpse into the little girl Shirley and her mommy who she loves so very much (and misses.) Great writing as always, my friend!
Laury
05/08/08
Shirley knowing you and your Mother as I do, this article took me back many years. As I read it I visualized those places, the heater in the kitchen, the dryer, the tents, and the mud puddle.Thanks for my memories that you brought back to me.You have a wonderful way with words, keep it up.