The Official Writing Challenge
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05/01/08
Oh, just brilliant. I love the repeated assurance throughout with the changed terms of endearment. The scenarios you chose to highlight were heart movers for me. This is a fabulous, creative piece of rhyme.
05/06/08
I absolutely LOVED THIS. I also loved the changing nicknames, OH! and the last line! Too perfect! One of my favorite poems this week, in a week of MANY poems.
05/06/08
So far--my favorite. Excellent structure, all the poetic elements are here, and it's overflowing with charm. LOVE it.
05/06/08
Wonderfully written poetry! I enjoyed analyzing your structure and your message comes through perfectly.
05/06/08
All your last lines are exquiste. Don't know anything about poetry, but I do know what I like and I LIKE this. You touched me deeply with this heartfelt entry.
05/07/08
I have read many great poems here on Faith Writers, and I must say that this poem is one of my absolute all time favorites! In fact, I am adding it to my favorites list. Superb job with this one!
06/22/08
Jason, I'm going to feature this delightful poem in the Front Page Showcase for the week of August 4th. Look for it on the FW home page, and congratulations!
08/05/08
This is such a beautiful poem. I love your structure as well as the rhythm you chose. You brought the story and the message to life! I really enjoyed it :]
08/06/08
So touching, it made me tear up. The little girl's actions and words are so true to life and the ending just touched your heart. A joy to read.
08/07/08
I loved the poem! The theme was so appropriate and the poem flowed. Thanks for sharing it!
08/08/08
Oh, this is absolutely wonderful, Jason! Straight to the heart with masterful skill and touching tenderness! Congratulations on being showcased on the FW front page.
08/10/08
Just wonderful- especially Gazillionth! Congratulations, and wriitten by a man I'm assuming from the name, yet with exceptional insight to this particular child/ mother bond
08/10/08
It's great to see this on the frontpage! Congrats!