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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Mother (as in maternal parent) (04/24/08)

TITLE: Love in the Scent
By Henry Clemmons
04/28/08


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Mother: morning comes with heavy humid breath,
scorching horizon’s hills with red warning fire;
northerly breezes carry the scent of death
marching to the drumbeat of Yankee desire.
Still, I smell your sweet potato pie when I close my eyes;
brief seconds remembering kisses on my cheek
before I’d go to the fields where I’d try
to fill father’s worn out shoes and seek
work to help ease your burden and blistered feet.
And, I hear your prayers, Mother, and I cry
because I know I must die and not cheat
reasons I carry the Rebel flag and cry
the rebel yell to help stem the invading blue tide
from flooding our land and your garden of greens.
I could care less about the “Southern” dream,
or slaves, I just protect my daddy’s bride; my
Mother: Dawn’s final day has winked at me
I see Daddy waving with a tear in his eye
Blood, from your womb, pools at my knees
And I savor the love in the scent of your sweet potato pie.


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Beth LaBuff 05/01/08
I'm fascinated with the Civil War. I especially like "rebel yell to help stem the invading blue tide" and "I just protect my daddy's bride" . It was a heart-breaking time in our nation's history with boys going off to fight other boys, sometimes relatives. I enjoyed the images you evoke with this poem, especially the "scent of the sweet potato pie." Thanks!
Holly Westefeld05/05/08
Powerful images and emotions in this evocative poem.
Chely Roach05/05/08
Extremely deep and powerful..executed in so few words.
LauraLee Shaw05/05/08
Who needs 750 words? I do, but you don't. Wow. This line moved me to tears: Mother: Dawn’s final day has winked at me
Debbie Wistrom05/06/08
This entry says so much. Great out of box for the topic.
Especailly loved this line "brief seconds remembering kisses on my cheek"

Keep writing these images from your mind.
Dianne Janak05/07/08
Loved this poem. A total refreshing surprise, and because of that, so deeply moving and emotional. Great creative idea and execution!
Joanne Sher 05/07/08
Wow - SO powerful and fascinating imagery. This blessed me.
Jan Ackerson 05/07/08
Oh Henry! Outstanding imagery, love your free-flowing style and sophisticated rhymes. You're my poetry hero.
Joy Faire Stewart05/07/08
Very moving and vivid descriptions. I especially like "...I must protect my daddy's bride..." Excellent!
Sara Harricharan 05/07/08
This is great! Lots of depth and emotion, especially with the detail of the sweet potato pie at the end. Sort of bittersweet. Nice job. ^_^
Carole Robishaw 05/07/08
WOW!

Powerfully written, beautiful images.
Loren T. Lowery05/07/08
Wow, Henry, you're going to make a poetry lover out of me yet. I was involved emotionally with the entire piece. Lovely, evocotive...simply outstanding!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/07/08
Wonderful poem. My favorite line was "Dawn's final day has winked at me."