The Official Writing Challenge
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05/02/08
I love the way you interpet the phrase "sand in my shoes" that's neat! I liked to see both journeys that this mother went on, both physical and emotional, what a trip!

I especially liked the line where "Maybe it's unsentimental to remember my mother for her feet"

Great job! ^_^
05/02/08
Oh, I really enjoyed this story about Momma's feet! :)

A favorite line is: "I remember her feet because they carried her, carried her to my bedside when I was sick, carried her to the kitchen to bake cookies, carried her across the sand."

I appreciate how you wove her physical/life walk and her spiritual journey into this piece, and I liked the imagery you used of sun, sand,plants, etc. Well done! :)

05/02/08
This a unique entry and so enjoyable. Especially loved this line. "Where summer raindrops the size of dinner plates fall on people who’ve given up on umbrellas."

Keep up the good words!
05/03/08
I loved how you weaved two stories into one with a common theme. This is very original and well done.
05/04/08
A wonderful journey, thanks for sharing it with us.We all need sand in our shoes at time or another.
05/04/08
Marvelous voice and the shoe tie-in was masterfully done. I truly enjoyed this read.
05/06/08
How wonderfully creative. Well done.
05/07/08
Exceptional!
05/08/08
This is so well-done, with such good word carpentry. You were brave to write this, spilling it all out, chaff and grain together, because that's how we all are: a mixture. I love your writing!!
05/09/08
CONGRATULATIONS on your EC! I'm glad your story did so well, as I really liked it when I first read it!