The Official Writing Challenge
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05/02/08
So beautiful. So sad. And so wonderful, all mingled together.
05/02/08
So very sad! I loved the character of Mary Alice the best. I was mad at the older nurse for simply yanking away Nathan...but you did good. Lots of emotion and good atmosphere here. I liked it. ^_^
You told this poignant story with just exactly the right words. Your voice and sense of character are strong. It made me so glad I could keep my babies.
Well, the least you could do is post a tissue warning. ;0) I really enjoyed this heart-wrenching story. You had me right there in the room with mother and baby. Well done.
05/04/08
Oh, so tender and heartwrenching. Excellent characterization and emotion especially. This definitely needs a tissue warning.
05/06/08
I realised half way through what was happening. You did a good job with a difficult aspect of motherhood. The contrast between the nurses was very effective - one so tender and the other so harsh.
05/06/08
You told me enough, but left me hoping for more—that's good! Well done.
05/06/08
Ouch, this story really cuts deep. I felt so sorry for the mother (and the baby), and wondered what circumstances surrounded this birth that meant she had to adopt out her child.
05/07/08
So bittersweet and touching! This story happens so often, and I was able to feel that mother's pain over a tough decision. Great job!
Gulp! I had no idea how this was going to end but it was told with such compassion that any way would have been a winner. Of course, it leaves many questions unanswered but we don't need to know. This was a few moments in time and those of us who read it won't forget it. How tender and beautiful. And heartbreaking!
05/09/08
Oh, this was heart-wrenching! You did an excellent job with this sad subject, and I congratulate you on your EC! My favorite line was: "My heart wrapped around his heart just as surely as my body had covered his while I waited for his birth."