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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Mother (as in maternal parent) (04/24/08)

TITLE: Unborn Dreams
By
04/28/08


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Unborn Dreams

There isn’t time to change her mind,
They told my mother lies,
Restricted by these clamps that bind;
I hear her inward cries.

There isn’t room to shift and squirm,
Please, take that thing away.
I was made to grow full-term;
My hope you did betray.

Before I formed you in the womb,
I knew you…


There isn’t time to understand,
No time to move aside,
Save me from this glove-swathed hand;
I need a place to hide.

There’s no time to shun the tomb,
This fear has taken hold,
My heart beats strong within her womb;
I’ve never felt so cold.

I will never leave nor forsake you,
Don’t be afraid...


There isn’t time to know my name,
My face she will not see,
All I feel is Mother’s shame;
My life will never be.

There isn't even time to cry,
All I can do is pray.
No…I do not want to die;
So please, just go away.

When you walk through valley,
Fear no evil…


There isn’t time to hug you, Mum
Or look upon your face,
Listen to you sing or hum
And know your true embrace.

I'll never walk upon the earth,
It’s time to say goodbye—
This wasn’t meant to be my birth,
Mother…it’s time for me to die.

I have called you by name,
Take my hand…



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Scripture quotes from: Jeremiah 1:5, NIV. Deuteronomy 31:8, NIV. Psalm 23:4 Isaiah 43:1b NASB


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Jason Swiney05/01/08
What a message!! I hope this reaches someone who may be considering such a decision, because it is definitely thought provoking. Very clever take on the topic.
Marita Thelander 05/01/08
Oh, so well done. Very sad, but well written. Thank-you for sharing.
Chely Roach05/01/08
Beautiful. Sad. Too true.
Jesus Puppy 05/02/08
Well done. Showing the true Victim's point of view on abortion is hardly ever thought of. Good that you have shown it well.
Edmond Ng 05/02/08
A view from the unborn; an unusual angle indeed! You certainly hit the nail on the head to get the message across! Let those who are considering such action open their ears and hear!
Myrna Noyes05/02/08
Wonderful poem, powerful messge! Thank you for this excellently written and deeply moving piece! Very creative!
Lynn Pinkham05/03/08
WOW! Very well done, and very moving. thanks for sharing.
Joanne Sher 05/03/08
Excellent descriptions, and an extremely poignant piece, from a voice that needs to be heard.
Beth LaBuff 05/03/08
You've done an amazing job of writing this powerful poem. I verses interspersed between stanzas is very creative and effective. And I love the ending that gives such comfort in the midst of a heart-breaking situation.
Laury Hubrich 05/04/08
Very nice job. The unborn have no voice. Thank you for being a voice for them thru this poem.
Laury
Betty Castleberry05/05/08
This *really* touched me. It is so well done, and gets the point across so well. Both thumbs up.
Sheri Gordon05/05/08
Wow, Chrissy. This is incredible.

I was co-director at a pregnancy counseling center--and you have really nailed this incredibly sad act from the position of the unborn.

I would love to share this with the counselors at the center--I think it could be a powerful tool for them to use.

Great job with the topic.
Joy Faire Stewart05/05/08
Very powerful poem. Excellent voice for those who cannot speak.
Joanney Uthe05/05/08
Wow! What a wonderful POV for the topic. Sad entry, but much needed message. Powerful writing.
Lyn Churchyard05/05/08
This moved me to tears. Oh my, how heartbreaking. You have done a marvelous job on speaking from the unborn babe's point of view. Chrissy, this is superb.
LaNaye Perkins05/05/08
This is so moving and moved me to tear. God bless you for writing it. Well done!
Willena Flewelling 05/06/08
If only every young mother who considers such a "solution" could read this. :(
Julianne Jones05/06/08
Wow, Chrissy! A unique and creative approach and so powerful and moving. Well done!
Jan Ackerson 05/06/08
So moving, Chrissy, and I especially love the Scripture snippets that you put between each stanza--just the right touch.
Joshua Janoski05/06/08
Adding scripture to this made it even more powerful than it already was.

This would be a great witnessing tool for those women considering abortions. You gripped me with this, and while sad, you spoke the truth about this very sensitive subject.

I appreciate you sharing this, Aunt Chrissy.
Beckie Stewart05/06/08
This is excellent and heartwrenching.
Yvonne Blake 05/06/08
Wow! Very powerful! I like the way you took it from the baby's POV. Well done!
**THIS SPARKLES**
Debbie Wistrom05/06/08
Bold and telling.

Your voice is heard loud and clear.

Wonderful!
Pam Carlson-Hetland05/06/08
Incredibly heartwrenching, Chrissy. And as others have pointed out, the Scripture verses really add to this wonderfully written poem. Wow!
Sara Harricharan 05/07/08
WOW! So incredibly sad, and heartbreaking. Your title hinted at what was to come, but the rest of it, the actual story-the ryhme the flow and especially the words in bold. Gave me goosebumps reading it. ^_^
Loren T. Lowery05/07/08
Starteling and packs an emotional wallop. Your Biblical reference gives a quiet peace about this, the last line in particular. Wonderful job in presenting this heart-wrenching subject.
Lauryn Abbott05/07/08
Chrissy, this is such a gut-wrenching piece (tears, tears, tears). WOW! I don't even know what to say. Please put this out there somehow, it really could make a difference to someone who is considering making this decision.
Jeffrey Snell05/07/08
Heart-breaking...and still, there is hope in He who gives eternal life! Terrific perspective for Mother's Day.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/07/08
Incredibly sad--yet beautiful