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Haunting and so well done. I loved your repetition, it tied it all together so well. I feel we may have a placer with this talented creation.
Dark and deep, not one to read right before going to sleep. I liked the imagery produced throughout the piece, and I enjoyed the tiny morsel of hope you left at the end.
Great piece. I liked the flow and the repeated line - very creative. I can relate with creating a new order in a family and you've pictured it so well. Welldone!
Your title aroused my curiosity. Wow! This story is very gripping. I like this, "This cures--this genetic shrapnel--is like a thistle spur in my shoe," and your reference to "Wormwood". I like the repitition of your "I curse this curse. I curse the rain." Then your ending, "I'll love the rain." Amazing writing with this!
WOW! I cried as I read this piece. And yet, I was captured by your words and phrases. You have a fantastic talent, Michelle. Every phrase presents a vibrant picture. God has brought you from depths I can barely imagine. You are surely a wonderful trophy of God's loving mercy.
oh, Woooowwwwwwww. This hit me big time! What an impacting, powerful piece for those of us with passed down strongholds. This ending was one of my favorites ever in this kind of piece, because it left the reader with magnificent hope:
I’ve seen letters I wish I could unread…words I long to UN-hear…knowledge of your deeds that I’d pay to unlearn. With the Armor of God, I will shield them from your plans beyond my death…because when it comes to you, evil one, ignorance is bliss.”
Great work. Your imagery and personifications are the sign of a mature writer. And your content and mood is wonderfully deliberate. Keep up the good work.
Oh my, this is so powerful and incredible! Excellent writing.
Michele, this is a remarkable piece. So many families suffer from generational addictions and abuse. You painted that picture perfectly and ended with a promise of breaking the cycle. Masterful writing.
This is really, really good. Your descriptions of the horrendousness of the stronghold are incredible.

I was a little confused by the "ignorance is bliss" line, 'cause I think too many people are overtaken by satan's demons because they pretend he doesn't exist. But I'm not sure that's what you meant. I'm thinking that line means that sometimes it's best not to know all the details of the evil--but to put on the armour and just fight.

Awesome job, and I love the very last line.
Excellent, excellent, excellent. This must have been very difficult for you to write--my hat's off to you. Did I mention--this is EXCELLENT.
Wow! I think this piece is one of the best I have read from you so far, Michele. You have a wonderful vocabulary, and you definitely utilized it in this piece. I could feel the pain in this as I read it.

I enjoyed your comparison of the family tree to a Weeping Willow. That description fits the family and gives the reader insight into the decades of struggles that they have faced.

Mental wounds often cut deeper than physical wounds, and this story conveys that. I appreciate you giving hope at the end, because in God, there is the power to break generational curses.
This is incredible, Michelle. Wow. I don't know what to say that hasn't already been said. Very powerful.
This is excellently done! What a tragic story, but there is a potent message here,too. Thank you for sharing this!
Michele...from pain often comes our best works. This is very well written. Appreciate you sharing in such a deep, emotional way. Thank-you for blessing us with your talent. I feel led to be praying blessings on you and ALL your hands find to do.
Wow! This is great, one of your best yet, I think! I liked the descriptions, the details everything. My favorite touch was with the weeping willow though-I like weeping willows and could relate to what you described. Nicely done and I like how the italics change at the end to be that the MC will change this and she'll love the rain. Great job! ^_^
Michelle, I don't think I can say anything that hasn't already been said. This was brilliant and I cried through it. What a great mom you are, to determine to break the generational curse from touching your children!My own mother suffers from depression, which is why we're not close. I try to be mindful of her illness, but sometimes it's hard too when she's hurtful. Thank you for this amazing reminder that it's not her and I'm not wrestling against flesh and blood. You have such talent and I am always captivated by your words. God bless you and your children, my friend!
Vivid descriptions, I appreciate your treatment of the spiritual world as as real (if not moreso) as the physical. Some interesting choices made by the protagonist--is this a true story?
Congratulations on your EC. This is so powerful, and one of my favorites this week.
Wow. Chills. I must say I have never before thought of Satan as a stalker, but that is exactly what he is. Very powerful depiction. The Bible compares him to a prowling lion, but in a world where lions are rarely the threat they once were (the only lions most of us see are in zoos), I think you've done a wonderful job of giving us an analogy that DOES terrify us--someone hawking our every move with the sole intent of causing us pain and hounding our destruction. And I like the reference to Wormwood, I'm assuming from C.S. Lewis. I think Screwtape Letters is another haunting work. So many people, Christians even, refuse to believe Satan exists, when in truth he should be our greatest fear, and it is only with the power of Christ that we are able to overcome at all. As you well pointed out, the Bible doesn't outline spiritual armor merely to paint a beautiful picture. From someone who has seen the power of an addiction, and knows what it means to pray for forgetfulness (a release from the shame and the constant reminder of how little you deserve God's grace, God's own "forgetfulness"), well done.
I was intimately drawn into this piece as I was cascaded from one emotion to another. I could feel the stalker clutching onto his victims and as the story ended I felt the release as chains were broken under the burden of prayer - with a vow that you will break the curse and love the rain. I too, felt this was your best so far - the imagery was powerful. I think the most genius part you employed in this was image of the "stalker" Always lurking, always waiting... Thank you for a piece straight from your heart.
I am in awe of this piece, both its writing and its message. Everything about it speaks of emotional turmoil, courage and final breakthroughs. The word confrontation comes to mind after reading this, knowing that if we are to deafeat the enemy, we must face them and not turn away. This is what this piece (to me) so well instructs. Congratualions on your well deserved placement. Loren
What an excellent piece of writing here Michelle. it must have made you sweat blood to make it so good. Your fighting spirit shines through and I can almost see you gritting your teeth and wielding your sword in sporadic triumphs, and even when you are down it lies by your side ready to rise again. Congratulations.
Wow! Incredible writing and such a heartfelt message. I won't forget this in a hurry. Well done on your EC.
Wow! Incredible writing and such a heartfelt message. I won't forget this in a hurry. Well done on your EC.
Wow! Incredible writing and such a heartfelt message. I won't forget this in a hurry. Well done on your EC.
I am speechless (and this doesn't happen often). I was very young when your mother died, and can remember how much pain you were in, and hearing my sister talk to my parents (who were normal then) about it. I am very sorry for your loss, and please know that you are in my thought and prayers. Writing this has to make you feel like a weight has been lifted. The extent of your wiriting abilities amazes me.

Rachel Hogbin (Chrissy's little sister)
I don't know what to say that hasn't been said before but did want to express my awe in reading this story. What I like is the hope that begins to rise with the ending...God is indeed greater than any destroyer or Wormwood that is out is a spiritul battle...and only He can break the power of the evil one. This reminds me of the "This Present Darkness" book series.
Very candid and real. I could relate in many ways, even though my "stalker" isn't alcohol. I understand the feeling of sin lying at the door, waiting to pounce. Thank you for sharing so honestly.
You have a truly God-given talent to paint a picture with words. Every time I read one of you articles I learn something more about you and I am very thankful for that. "If God is for us, who can be against us?"

Love ya, Kris
CONGRATULATIONS on your level win and your EC! I am not surprised at all! :)
What an amazing article, I am simply boggled at how deep the story goes in terms of symbolism and typology. Can't wait to see more work from you.
Chely--I'm going to feature this in the Front Page showcase for the week of June 2. Look for it on the FW Home Page, and congratulations!
This is still, in my opinion, one of your best pieces on FaithWriters. You have such a great gift of writing from the Lord, and I'm glad to see it being showcased this week.
You left me breathless with the intensity of this piece. The imagery and emotion touched me so deeply Michele. I wish I had adequate words to express how much I loved this.

Congratulations on your showcase, it is well earned my faith writer friend.

I was struck anew by this second reading. So happy for you that such a deep and moving piece will be read again and by new readers. Congratulations on your very talented showcase.
I said it once, I'll say it again. Astoundingly amazing. Wow.
Awesome piece of writing. Really touched me deeply. My stalker was alcohol, yet Jesus was stronger and brought me through. I'm glad my children were aware of it as it has put them off going down the same path. Bless you for having the courage to share.
I'm so glad this entry was featured. I missed it the week it was recognized. Excellent, excellent portrayal of the evil one. Powerful and well-written!
Michele -- Congrats on having this piece as the FW 500 Frontpage Showcase article!
Hi - congratulations and an interesting take on Spiritual Warfare - Thank you for sharing and excellent writing.
I had to read this twice - the first time through I was so enraptured I read too fast. I am in awe of your talent, and your courage to write this piece that can only come from your heart of hearts. If it doesn't, then I'm even more in awe of your talent. Absolutely superb.
Wow! I missed this, but what a story and what powerful images you've created in this story. It's both bone-chilling and bittersweet. Great writing!
You have the heart of a poet. Well done for making something as abstract as spiritual warfare through our family and generations, accessible and real. I liked the image of the family tree as the weeping willow. Made we wonder about my family-what would be our symbolic tree? very good.
Chely, I'm so glad you posted this in Jan's class, cuz I missed it the first time around. Stunningly good! You gripped me around the throat with your writing. I'm still choked. Wow!