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I have to chuckle at this! I love the tone and voice of this piece, it pulled me into the story and I was happy to follow it all the way through to the end. The little ending made me smile, I liked how you showed the changes, etc. Very nicely done! ^_^
I loved the descriptions. At least I think I did. Some were so realistic they brought back my own childbirth memories.
This line made me chuckle:
"She prays every hour that God will move up her due date, swearing she’ll never do that again with her husband."
Thanks for this entertaining read.
So well written that it felt like reliving those two 9-month cycles preceeding the arrival of my two little ones. Your conclusion reminds me of my wife going through a difficult 19 hour labor, which seemed so bad I would have thought she would never do it again, but as soon as our daughter was placed in her arms, said, "I want another one..."
You've presented delightfully a familiar journey for mommies, and you conclude it perfectly.
Clever and fun - and realistic. That last line is PERFECT.
I had a very lovely time reading this. It took me back to the time I was pregnant with my daughter.
I particularly cherish the last line AND BABY TURNS TWO.
My daughter turned two in February and all is not peaceful in our home anymore. I know psychologists call it THE TERRIBLE TWOS but my husband and I call it THE TERRIFIC TWOS.
Very creative way of writing this. I read every word not wanting to miss anything. Excellent. You should submit this to a pregnancy or new mother magazine.
A very entertaining piece, and the last line made me laugh out loud. LOL...2!
How creative is this! What memories this brings back...could remember all to well. Now my little firstborn is my giant twelve-year-old. Well done!
Personally, I think it's impossible for this to be any better than it is. Great work.