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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Mother (as in maternal parent) (04/24/08)

TITLE: The Switch
By Irvine Saint-Vilus
04/25/08


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The Switch


The switch cracked the air, triggering our fears, and sent us running. Mama was at it again, being the disciplinarian Papa was before his passing. “Come here to me,” she yelled to no avail.

My brothers and I raced to the door seeking refuge behind trees, or behind the house away from Mama’s gaze; dispersed like a herd of deer at the first sight of the switch. It was the one that Mama always picked, a brown, leather bound set of ropes wound like a snake in her closet.

We divided Mama’s focus but didn’t laugh in pride, the pain in her eyes fairing worse than any flogging down our backside. Her love was strange but true. She’d always say, “Better you cry now than I cry later.”

We pray that God removes her pain and make Mama what she was before the loss. Before Papa was no more and her smile stopped touching her heart. And then we say, “Lord, don’t make her believe this lie, that without her life’s love, she can’t have the love of her life, Jesus Christ.


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Sylvia Hensel05/01/08
This was such a sad, sad story, but well written. I pray she was able to overcome.
Sylvia Hensel05/01/08
This was such a sad, sad story, but well written. I pray she was able to overcome.
Sylvia Hensel05/01/08
This was such a sad, sad story, but well written. I pray she was able to overcome.
Sylvia Hensel05/01/08
This was such a sad, sad story, but well written. I pray she was able to overcome.
Sylvia Hensel05/01/08
Such a sad story, but well written. I pray she was able to overcome.
Sylvia Hensel05/01/08
Sorry for the repeats. Had trouble with computer.
Sylvia Hensel05/01/08
Sorry for the repeats. Had trouble with computer.
Sylvia Hensel05/01/08
Sorry for the repeats. Had trouble with computer.
Beth LaBuff 05/02/08
A heart-breaking story. Your pain and that of your mother comes through your writing. Your description of the switch would be enough to put fear in a child. I like your ending statement.. “Lord, don’t make her believe this lie, that without her life’s love, she can’t have the love of her life, Jesus Christ." There is hope contained in this sentence, if the lie is not believed. Nice work on this.
Marilyn Schnepp 05/04/08
I LOVED the "Better you cry now than I cry later" quote! Short, sweet and to the point Entry. Good Job!
Debi Derrick05/04/08
This is difficult to read. I think I'm looking for some redeeming virtue in this mother and not finding it. I hope redemption came/comes her way.
c clemons05/05/08
You had a beginning (a very good one I might add) and you had a end, but no middle. There is obviously alot you could have said about this woman that you did not, and the switch for that matter. Half the people reading this probably do not have a clue what a "switch" is. This read more like a private commentary than an article.
nicole wian05/05/08
I felt that you packed so much into such a short piece. I thought it was very good.