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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Uncles/Aunts (04/17/08)

TITLE: The Story of Bobo, Marka and Uncle Yafeu.
By Preacher Johnson
04/24/08


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“Gamba, I don’t understand.”

“All I know is God is calling, and we must go. I need to have you take care of the twins.”

“I am their uncle. They should be raised by their mother and father.”

“Listen, Yafeu, God has called Reta and I, we will stop when God tells us and we will return when He allows.”

“Have you told Bobo and Marka yet? Do they know you are abandoning them and leaving them with their uncle?”

“I thought the three of us would tell them together.”

The two brothers walked into the clearing. Reta was a good distance away from the youngsters sitting by herself. She arose and walked to them.

“Yafeu, will you do it?”

“Of course I will. I just don’t understand why God would have two wonderful parents like yourselves just up and leave their young ones.”

When the young ones saw the three of them approaching, they ran toward them yelling “Yafeu!”

When they met, the youngsters jumped and pawed at their uncle.

“Have you come to play with us?” Bobo and Marka yelled in unison.

“Listen here my twins. Mommy and Daddy have something very important to tell you.” Reta interrupted.

Gamba, the head of this proud family spoke to his only two offspring, “Bobo, my son, Marka, my daughter. God has called us, your mother and I, we must leave and follow God’s call. God has told us that we must leave you both behind.”

Through eyes of desperation the twins spoke, “No father.” said Bobo.

“When will you leave?” asked Marka.

Gamba continued to talk, “God has given us today to set our affairs in order and we will be leaving in the morning. You will be staying with your uncle.”

Dazed looks of disbelief and despair overcame the faces of the twins but they said nothing more, understanding that they could not argue with God.

The following morning Reta was up early and readied zebra meat, the twins’ favorite breakfast.

A long good-bye, then Gamba and Reta slowly disappeared in the forest leaving their twins with uncle Yafeu.

“We could follow them.” Bobo broke the silence.

“What?”

“We could follow them. We could see where God has called them. Momma has been teaching Marka tracking skills. She could lead us.”

“She is only a youngster.”

“Uncle Yafeu, I can do it. I can follow mom and dad’s trail. They would never know.” said the female.

“Well, I reckon we need something to do today. But I am telling you, if we lose the trail, we come right back here. Agreed?”

With eyes as wide as coconuts the twins jumped to their feet, “Yes, Uncle we agree.”

With that, the three headed into the forest led by the young Marka. Broken branches, prints in the sand, these plus other clues led our adventurers. Then on the morning of the seventh day the trio came to a clearing and Marka stopped so fast the two males bumped into her.

“There they are, look!” whispered Marka.

Yafeu, looked into the clearing from the woods and gave his niece and nephew words of warning. “There are people out there. People are nothing but evil. We must not be seen. We must not be captured like your parents.”

The twin lion cubs ran toward their mom and dad. Protective uncle Yafeu took off after them in hot pursuit but it was to late. The cubs met their parents just as Gamba and Reta placed their giant paws on the ramp.

Noah was confused but he said nothing. He only observed as the lion family seemed to be comforting each other.

“Gamba, I don’t understand.”

“This is where God has brought us. God has chosen me and Reta to be the parents of all lions after us.”

“What about your son and daughter?”

“They will go with the rest of all living creatures. Explain to them that they will see mommy and daddy again someday, but it will be after they have arrived with the Lord.”

“When will these things be?”

“Soon.”

Reta, who had been playing with the cubs stopped suddenly and told her children, “Go with your uncle now.”

Cubs and uncle retreated to the edge of the forest. They watched as God closed the door.

“Uncle Yafeu! Did you feel that?” asked Bobo, “It felt like a drop of water fell from the sky.”


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Debbie Wistrom04/24/08
OUTSTANDING! Out of the box, fresh characters, surpise twist, wonderful story. I will be surprised and very disappointed if this doesn't take 1st place.
Mandy White04/24/08
This was so creative! I guessed that these were lions at the beginning because of the name Yafeu--it reminded me of The Lion King. Excellent job!
Betsy Markman04/24/08
Wow, I'm impressed with the imagination that went into this. What a unique perspective!
Sara Harricharan 04/25/08
WOW! This was great! I loved the ending twist here and especially how they turned out to be lions! Great job-I felt this whole story come alive and it was just-wow! Excellent job. ^_^
Jan Ackerson 04/28/08
I generally don't care for talking animal stories, but once I got to the end of this one--and that drop of water from the sky--I LOVED this POV. I'm sure I've never read anything like it before. The pull on all those pairs of animals must have been indescribable. EXCELLENT!
Sheri Gordon04/28/08
Wow. This is incredible. Excellent POV. This seemed so realistic.
Chely Roach04/28/08
Absolutely speechless here. Wow.
Willena Flewelling 04/29/08
Very well written! You've captured the emotions perfectly!
Lynda Schultz 04/29/08
Whoa—such a creative mind to write this Biblical story from the perspective of the animals left behind. Well done, and has has already been said — well out of the box. Good work.
Loren T. Lowery04/30/08
Very creative and out of the box thinking. Exceptionally written and opens a while new door to the story of the ark. Great job!
Dee Yoder 04/30/08
Yes, it's very unique and I've never thought of how the animals came to Noah. The call of the Lord on the wild is an astounding notion! But, I can't help being sad, too, because the parents were leaving their off-spring to certain death. That kind of left me feeling a sense of doom at the end for Bobo and...ah phooey! I'm just an ol' softy. (:
LauraLee Shaw05/01/08
Congratulations! Well done. Loved this piece!
Beth LaBuff 05/01/08
Congrats on your level placing with this!!
Sheri Gordon05/01/08
Congratulations on your 2nd place. I'm so glad to see this story was recognized. It was one of my favorites this week.
Joanne Sher 07/01/08
Oh WOW. This is MONSTERLY creative and compelling and just wonderful. SO glad this one did well (and thank you for "sending me" through your entries, or I may have never read, and been blessed by, this one).
Gerald Shuler 12/13/08
Love the POV. I always wondered how Noah kept all but two ants off the ark.
Lyn Churchyard12/13/08
I can see why this scored second place. The entry that received 1st must have been enormously creative. This was just brilliant. Absolutely super!
Connie Dixon12/13/08
Really great story and perspective......such a different take on this story. Amazing!!!
Seema Bagai 12/13/08
Wow. I did not expect the twist in this piece. Excellent POV of the story of the flood.
Leah Nichols 12/14/08
You totally had me....I really didn't have a clue as to where you were going. Well done!
Tim Pickl12/14/08
I love the POV--"What were the animals thinking before the flood?" --you had me all the way to the end. Well done--I'm glad this one placed!
Amy Michelle Wiley 12/24/08
Clever story! I love Biblical fiction stories with a twist and this one surprised me. I was all in a stew about the unlikelyhood that God would call parents away from their kids so I didn't realize it wasn't actually humans until the story told me, haha. Fun story.
Mona Purvis05/19/09
WOW! Never thought about that aspect of the flood. Very interesting and the intrigue pulled me right along.
Mona
LaNaye Perkins07/03/09
How intriguing! I really enjoyed this story. It would make a great children's tale, leading up to the telling of Noah's Ark. Another really good story my FaithWriter friend. Well done!