The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice take on the story. Got off to a running start and ended that way too.
I loved this story - the personality attributed to each of the women, the confusion and fear - great!
You really got 'in there' with the two Marys. Well done. I liked this descriptive line: 'her dark brown hair fused to her face in sweaty strands'.
I liked your opening dialog, nice way to start the essay. Thank you for posting.
I loved the friendship between the two women, and the light humorous touches -just enough (like the description of the jaw drop :)
Very powerful. Well written. Atmospheric. Had me so engaged with the characters that I LOL at the end.
I must have gotten into your story because I am now SHORT OF BREATH :0)(all that running) very nicely done. Good writing.
Hope, Glad to see you jumped into the challenges again. I always love your stories and your writing was excellent, as always. Wonderful depiction of the two Marys. Made the scene "come alive" for me (pun intended! :-))
Blessings, Lynda