The Official Writing Challenge
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04/19/08
You have a great message and warning in this poem. I liked your rhyme and meter. I love your repitition in this, "The life he led
And tried to pass -- Unto his only son, -- Went in one eye
And out my ear." Then your ending is perfect for this. "I simply ... wanted." Nice work on this thought-provoking poem.