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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Father (as in paternal parent, not God) (04/10/08)

TITLE: Special Specialness
By Shirley McClay
04/16/08


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“Hey, Dad,” Chipper Chipmunk lay on his back, watching the clouds puff past. “Can we go swimming tomorrow?”

Mr. Chipmunk and Chipper were sprawled against the trunk of their home tree, high up near the tippy-top. At Chipper’s words he grinned as only a chipmunk can grin, “Crazy boy. What be you thinkin’?”

“Well, how about if we fly up through the clouds? I wonder what they look like from above.” A chirpy chipmunk laugh was the only answer from his dad.

Chipper had lolled in the foliage long enough, so he scampered down the big oak trunk to find his friends.

Dapple Deer was nestled under a fern leaf at the bottom of the tree all curled up with her head resting on her tummy.

“Dapple, does your daddy fly or swim?” Chipper perched on his toes and wiggled his nose so close to Dapple’s that they almost touched.

Dapple’s whiskers twitched but she stayed very still. “Sometimes he swims, but he would rather run like a shooting star and leap high over brush and fences. He can’t fly but he can still go faster than any other animal in these woods. He is the most amazing daddy ever!”

They listened to the forest sounds together for a few more minutes, but Chipper couldn’t be still for long. “See you later!”

He decided to see how fast he could run. Chipper hurried and scurried all the way to the pond.

Dilly Duck was sunning herself on a rock and waddled over to greet Chipper.

“The sun is so sizzling and the water is so frigid and I got tired of catching bugs and Mommy was getting grumpy and the other ducklings are so bossy and I was taking a snooze…” Chipper tried to catch his breath as Dilly used hers up.

She stopped to breathe so he quickly quizzed her, “Dilly, what makes your daddy special?”

She flopped her wings and hopped in silly circles around Chipper. “He can fly so high and dive so deep and be under water so long and quack so beautifully and swim so gracefully…” Dilly was out of breath again. She stopped circling and squatted beside him. Chipper was glad. He was feeling a bit dizzy.

A noisy quacking interrupted them, and Dilly dithered again. “Need to go, need to go! Daddy is giving us a flying lesson.”

Chipper watched as she flapped, hopped, and waddled her way over to the pond, and then speedily swam to join her family.

He turned to go but spied Bucky Beaver on his way from the woods pulling a big branch behind him. Chipper scuttled over to catch a ride on the branch. This was a game they often played together since Bucky was beaver-strong and Chipper was as light as a clump of leaves.

“Your dad is a super swimmer, Bucky. But do you ever wish he could fly?” He had hardly settled on the branch when the words tumbled out of his mouth.

“Hi, Chipper.” Bucky had to put the branch down to talk and now Chipper was the one who tumbled. Right down on top of a dandelion. He sneezed and they giggled together.

“Of course I don’t wish he could fly Chipper. That would be silly to see a beaver flying!” Bucky laughed so hard that he tumbled over and rolled in the green meadow grass.

“Hello, Chipper. What’s so funny?” Mr. Beaver dropped the sapling he was dragging to smile at the boys.

He laughed heartily when he heard the crazy question, but then he looked right into Chipper’s acorn-brown eyes.

“God gave each of us our own special… specialness!” They all snickered at the fun word. “Your dad has the most amazing ability to tuck things into his cheeks. I wish I could stuff this stubborn tree into my cheeks instead of having to drag it all the way home.” The boys hooted at the thought of Mr. Beaver with a tree stuffed in his cheeks.

“You both have such perky personalities and I always enjoy having you around. Your dad can make me smile even when I am at my grumpiest, and that’s an extra special ability.”

Chipper remembered how much fun Dad made the hard work of storing away seeds and nuts for the winter. In fact, everything was fun with his dad. He was pretty amazing after all!

“I think I’ll go hang out with my dad.”

Mr. Beaver winked at him.”Good idea.”

And Chipper scampered home.


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Holly Westefeld04/17/08
Absolutely creative and adorable! When are you getting an illustrator for this delightful children's book?
Beth LaBuff 04/18/08
Your title is fun. Your character names "Chipper, Dapple, Dilly, and Bucky" are precious! I like this description, "Chipper's acorn-brown eyes." The lesson in this story is great "special…specialness". This is very entertaining.
Marita Thelander 04/18/08
Very well written children's story. I can picture beautifully illustrated pictures for this , too. And the characters are awesome!
Joshua Janoski04/20/08
I like the title. It goes quite well with this cute children's story. I really would like to see this made into a book. I'd definitely buy a copy to read to my niece. :)

Wonderful writing that can be enjoyed by all ages.
Joanney Uthe04/21/08
Delightful, entertaining, creative, adorable. Great message told in a fresh, wonderful way. Great job.
Mandy White04/21/08
Shirley, this is wonderful. Such adorable little personalities these characters have. Great message too. I'm definitely reading this one to my kiddos!
Debbie Wistrom04/21/08
Loved everybit of this, I feel we have a placer here. Outstanding!
Chely Roach04/21/08
This was the sweetest children's story. I LOVED it!
Jan Ackerson 04/21/08
Hey, I found it! Very precious children's story, fun to read.
Lyn Churchyard04/22/08
I definitely want to see this illustrated. Absolutely delightful.
Laury Hubrich 04/23/08
I absolutely love LOVE this story, Shirley! I'd love to see you write more kids stories.
Laury
Sara Harricharan 04/23/08
Ah-dorable! I love it. So cute and a bit cuddly too. ^_^ I liked the word "Specialness" Children would love this story-that's for sure. It has all the lovely makings of a woodland fairy-tale. ^_^

Marita Thelander 04/24/08
Congratulations, Shirley! I knew this was a good one!
Beth LaBuff 04/24/08
Shirley -- Super congrats on placing with this!
Sheri Gordon04/24/08
Congratulations on your Highly Commended. Very cute children's story. Nice job with the topic.
Karen Wilber 04/24/08
Delightful! A wonderful story with a great message.
Julie Arduini04/26/08
I could just picture the scene. What a cute story and wonderful message. I hope this isn't the last we hear of you and this story.
Amy Michelle Wiley 06/07/08
Fun story! I hope you find an illustrator--I'd love to see the pics that go along.


   
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