The Official Writing Challenge
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Your title is so simple, yet perfect for this. Your descriptions of inside the pickup were very good, "even the air system gasped." I loved this sentence, "But the devil’s hot breath was about to meet its master: words from scripture spilled over the weary father like a freshet on burning sand." I love this heart-warming story.
Wow, this is really good! So many stifling images, and some awesome characterization. One of my favorites so far this week.
I love the suspense of this story and the title is perfect. A great read.
You said much here. You gave us a wonderful father, this is so well done. I truly am at a loss for words. Wonderful and keep it up is lame, so I'm sorry that I can't describe what I received from reading this piece.
Excellent, excellent story. Love the message, too. Your writing pulled me in and kept me completely engaged.
Excellent - so intense and fast-paced and engaging. Wonderful, Janice.