The Official Writing Challenge
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04/18/08
This is interesting. It's almost like you've interspersed lines of poetry between your paragraphs. I like it. Your realization that your main characters comes to, in your last paragraph, is very good. I like this, "God should have been my example all along." The lesson he learned is one we all need to be reminded of. Thanks!
04/22/08
Well written. I liked the interspersed doubts and guilt he felt.
04/22/08
What a very sad tale, and well told...I felt sad for the father. I felt sad for the daughter who never knew her dad. Your story ended well, but I am left wondering: Did the father ever reveal himself to his little girl--I presume, now grown? I hope so...Well done!..Helen