The Official Writing Challenge
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04/17/08
Oooh, what an ending! I want to know who was calling on the phone. Was it, by an slim chance, her mother? I liked that all of this happened on her 13th birthday, a general turning point into "teen-hood" for most girls. I loved the father/daughter angle and especially how they were able to talk to each other. Great writing! ^_^
Thoughtfully written. Lots of details make it easy to visualize. I could feel their love and their pain. Beautiful.
04/21/08
Poignant, bittersweet, well-written.
Like your take ont he topic. loved your MC's voice. I think the phone call is a new woman for dad. Endearing and poignant.
04/23/08
This is lovely and the characters jump off the page, they are so well written; and your scene descriptions are also vivid. This poignant and tender moment in life makes this a very touching story.
04/23/08
What a sad story. Well written. I like the title, and that fact that the lifetime of sadness is capsulated in one day. Nice job with the topic.
04/24/08
I loved this touching story, and so very well written too. Life is filled with bittersweet memories of what might have been...(PS: thanks for your comment on my "Uncle Sam".)
04/25/08
Betsy -- You have definitely captured farm life during planting season. I fell in love with your kitchen with the "cool evening breeze" and the "gingham-bordered curtains" that billow. I no longer live on the farm… so your description made me homesick. My husband worked on a hog farm for over 10 years and you get used to the smell, so your comments are perfect about father coming in after a day's work and being "dirty and smelly". Your birthday story is very heart-warming. I love what you did with the characters. Very nice work on this heartwarming story. Thanks for your recent comments--you made my day!