The Official Writing Challenge
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04/17/08
My dad loves flying and this was especially close to me. You captured the feelings and the intesity of flying blind-a terrifying experience, but sometimes a necessary one-I liked your comparison here, great job! ^_^
There is so much here that is amazing. So many well turned phrases. but here is my favorite. "He always put on confidence with his morning shirt,"

WOW what a description!

Thanks for this story.
The admiration a child has for their father, then the pain that adult child has of facing their father's death, came through authentically.
04/19/08
Wonderfully done:)) Love the way you worked into the ending! The only change I might suggest would be to watch the adjectives in the first paragraph. But I loved the examples you gave and descriptions! You are a good writer!!