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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Father (as in paternal parent, not God) (04/10/08)

TITLE: Unplanned Parenthood
By Kristen Hester
04/14/08


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Conner jumped a bit when he felt his cell phone vibrate in his back pocket. Mrs. Snodgrass, his English teacher, had her head down grading papers, so he sneaked at peek at the text message he’d just received.

The words he read made his heart stop and the blood drain from his face. He stared at the phone in horror. No, it couldn’t be!

“i’m pregnant - jc,” it read. A million thoughts raced simultaneously through his mind as he realized what his dad had always told him was true. One weak moment, one mistake could result in life-long consequences.

He wasn’t even dating Jacy any longer. They’d broken up a month ago, shortly after they’d “gone all the way.” Conner, a Christian, had felt deep remorse at his lapse in self-control and had sought Jacy’s forgiveness.

“Jacy, I feel really bad about what we did.”

Jacy pouted her glossy lips and looked through her long eyelashes at Conner. “Why? You didn’t enjoy it?” she asked as she moved her hand to his thigh.

Conner took a deep breath. This is going to be harder than I thought. “No, I mean, yes, of course, but...”

Jacy laughed at his frustration. “I knew you were Mr. Purity. Why do you think I had my eyes set on you? You were a challenge, for sure.”

He stared at her in shock. “Here I am feeling lousy about possibly taking advantage of you, when it was actually the reverse.”

She smiled sweetly, obviously enjoying his discomfort.

The conversation only went down hill from there and Conner hadn’t spoken to Jacy since that night. Now as each tortured moment ticked by, his misery increased. Not only was he going to be a father, his baby’s mother would be Jacy. He already felt sorry for his unborn child. His father had always told him, “The best gift you can give your children is a Godly mother.” Looks like I’ve already blown that.

The bell rang and Conner jumped again. As his classmates hurried out of the room ignoring the teacher’s last minute reminders, Conner rose slowly. His feet felt heavy and but his head felt light. He scanned the hall for Jacy, but didn’t see her. In a trance, he walked to Spanish.

As Mrs. Mungia explained how to conjugate Spanish verbs, Conner slid down in his chair and let his mind try to grasp the significance of Jacy’s words.

He thought about his own father, his role model. What made him a great dad? He was wise and he was a good provider. I’m neither of those. His dad also spent time with him, teaching him to fish, camp, drive and play sports. Most importantly, he taken him to church and introduced him to Jesus Christ. Knowing his father would be disappointed made the situation even more painful.

Lord, I’m not ready for this. He knew that the greatest gift his dad gave him was love. I could love my child, he thought. But was that enough?

His own father had never even heard the words, “I’m pregnant” from his mother. After ten years of marriage they had adopted him. Perhaps the most loving thing would be to find mature parents like his to raise this child. Thinking of the happiness a baby would bring a ready dad almost made him smile, but could he give up his own blood? He wasn’t sure.

This time when the bell rang, Conner jumped up and ran through the halls to Jacy’s locker. When he spotted her, he slowed down. Her back was to him. Reaching out, he put a gentle hand on her shoulder.

Jacy flipped her head around. She was smiling; but when she saw Conner, her smile faded and she gazed at him with sad eyes. “Oh, Conner,” she said as she wrapped her arms around him.

“We really need to talk,” Conner whispered tenderly.

Over her shoulder Conner noticed Jacy’s two best friends watching the scene and giggling. “What are they laughing at?”

Jacy turned to her friends. “Stop it, you guys,” Jacy said and then started laughing herself. “Oh, I can’t do it. Conner, I was kidding. I’m not pregnant.”

Conner’s mouth dropped open and he had to exercise total control not to strangle her. Jacy and her friends bounced down the hall, leaving Conner standing alone, dumbfounded. He reached for his cell phone to call his best friend, someone who would understand and love him no matter what.

“Dad? Can we talk?”


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Chely Roach04/17/08
Wow,what a powerful story. Nice twist at the end. Phew...
Betsy Markman04/17/08
Very good! I like the thought processes, the emotions, and the fact that he turned to his father, even though it meant confessing his earlier failing. A very enjoyable read.
Lynda Schultz 04/17/08
Not everyone gets a second chance. Glad Connor took it! Well done.
Christine Miles04/17/08
Whooooo! I would like to get hold of that girl! Great characterisation, and good to see the MC grow.
Laury Hubrich 04/19/08
This was a nice entry. Even our Christian kids trip up. Nice job.
Laury
Sharlyn Guthrie04/20/08
Oh the twists and turns! Great writing, and powerful stuff for today's teens.
Sheri Gordon04/21/08
I really like the twist--although I did guess it was coming. Maybe because I worked at a pregnancy counseling center and I know what teenage girls, like Jacy, are capable of.

You did a good job explaining the diverse characters in a short time. And I like that he calls his dad at the end. This would be a good short skit for a youth group.
LauraLee Shaw04/21/08
This piece is filled with incredible descriptions and details that made me want to keep reading. I learn so much by studying pieces like these that flow so smoothly and put the reader right into the story. Well done.
Jan Ackerson 04/21/08
Oh Kristen, we had the same thought this week! Great minds...

I really like your approach to this. Our "fathers" could have been the same guy, but our girls were very different, and you were able to bring yours to closure as I could not. Excellent!
Celeste Duckworth04/21/08
What a thought provoking piece that helps the reader wonder about their own choces. Well written.
Joanney Uthe04/21/08
Very well written. I enjoyed the twist at the end and the realization that his dad was his best friend.
Peter Stone04/21/08
Ouch, what a mess. I really felt for the poor guy - she was running circles around him. The ending was a great twist.
Joshua Janoski04/22/08
I loved the intense build up of emotions and then the surprise ending. You kept me waiting in anticipation to see what decision Connor was going to make.

I have met girls like Jacy who try to entice guys that they know are trying to stay pure, simply so they can brag about bringing them down. I am glad that Connor felt remorse for the mistake that he made.

Another superb entry, which is what you always bring to the table. Thank you for sharing this Kristen. :)
Janice Cartwright04/22/08
Wow, Kristen. This is such good story-telling. You took me on an emotional roller coaster and at the end I breathed prayer of thanksgiving for Conner. Jacy being the kind of girl she was made it totally believable that she would play a practical joke on Conner, a boy she considered a hopeless innocent. But it was also sad to see the spiritual void in Jacy and her friends. I especially liked your final sentence, revealing that Connor would share his lesson with a loving father.
Janice Cartwright04/22/08
Wow, Kristen. This is such good story-telling. You took me on an emotional roller coaster and at the end I breathed prayer of thanksgiving for Conner. Jacy being the kind of girl she was made it totally believable that she would play a practical joke on Conner, a boy she considered a hopeless innocent. But it was also sad to see the spiritual void in Jacy and her friends. I especially liked your final sentence, revealing that Connor would share his lesson with a loving father.
Janice Cartwright04/22/08
Sorry about my comment appearing twice. Nothing was happening so I hit the review button again. :)
Loren T. Lowery04/23/08
Well, if you ask me, this is a great story to reinforce absinence. It is told in a way that is a real eye opener without being preachy. You were able to put the reader right there in the protagonist's shoes and have them wondering, just what they would do...not to mention the feeling of remorse. I liked, too the relationship Conner had with his dad. Great job.
Sharon Henderson04/23/08
Great story. Solid character development in a short space.
Sara Harricharan 04/23/08
Oooh, that Jacy makes me sooo mad! I wish I could shake her or something! Ugh. This was a great story, I completely went 'into it' and felt as if I were another student watching the drama unfold from the shadows. I'm so glad too that Connor was sorry for what he did and that he chose to call his dad in the end. Great job! ^_^