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06/06/05
Well written and you have all your pointslined up well. Just watch your tenses remaining the same in each paragraph.
06/08/05
A nice sermonette, good points. As mentioned watch the tense shifts, and in the first paragraph the 2nd. person.
06/09/05
A lot of good points here, my favorite: "Christ gave us a victory that we did not earn or deserve; yet, it is ours to have. Let us rejoice and be glad in Him!"
You have written the sufferings of Christ which is immaculate. I really fell in love with your article.
06/11/05
Well written sermon. One problem for me. Who is your audience? If the unsaved and this is a gospel message then words like redeem and redemption need explanation.