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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Grandparent(s) (04/03/08)

TITLE: Dunkin' Cookies
By Patty Wysong
04/09/08


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Willa looked out her kitchen window and saw the new neighbor boy still slouched in a lawn chair. That's it, Lord. He's been there for half an hour. I'm going over. She pulled down a plate and piled fresh cookies on it. After setting it on a tray with a carton of milk and two glasses, she went outside.

“Jason, come give me a hand, Honey. Grab this little table and stick it between the chairs so we can enjoy these cookies.”

Jason's bare feet scuffed the grass, but he moved the table then stood back.

Willa held the plate out to him. “I love baking, but with just me and Howard it's just not as fun. Think you could help me out?”

He smiled at her and reached for a cookie, waiting politely while she poured them some milk. She dunked her cookie in her milk and took a big bite. “Mmmmmm. I don't know about you, but I love cookies an' milk.”

A big grin lit Jason's face as he followed her example.

“Not too shabby, huh?” Willa said with her mouth full.

This time Jason giggled.

Willa made her eyes wide. “What? Do I have crumbs on my chin?”

He giggled again. “I thought my Nana was the only old lady who dunked her cookies in milk and talked with her mouth full.” Jason reached for another cookie, but his hand stopped midair.

Willa smiled and nodded to the plate. “Help yourself, because if you don't, I'll eat more than you do.” She took another big bite of cookie. “So, your nana likes cookies an' milk, too?”

Jason sighed. “Yeah. But she can't come this summer.”

“That's too bad. I bet she really misses you.” Willa looked around their adjoining yards and sighed. “I miss my grandkids since they moved.” She looked at him. “We're quite a pair aren't we? I'm a granma, missing my grandkids, and you're a grandkid missing your nana. We ought'a just adopt each other.”

Jason grinned. “Yeah, we ought'a.” He took a drink of milk and eyed the cookie plate. “Does that mean I could have another cookie? These are the best chocolate chip cookies I've ever had.”

Willa laughed. “Why thank you! You can have as many as you like.” Lord, please don't let me come on too strong and scare him away. “Have you ever been to Vacation Bible School, Jason?”

Jason's eyes sparkled. “Yeah! Nana use'ta bring me every summer. It was great.” The sparkles quickly faded. “Mom's too busy, though.”

“Would you like to come with me next week?” Willa asked. “I asked your mom this morning and she said it's ok.” Please Lord, let him come with me.

“Really? You're going?”

“Yup. I go every year and I'd love for you to go with me.” Willa passed the cookie plate. “You want the last one?”

Jason took the cookie, his eyes never leaving Willa's. “Next week?”

“Yup. All week.” Willa smiled.

“Will they teach me about Jesus?” Jason asked, hope filling his eyes.

Willa's heart squeezed. “Yes, they will. Do you know Jesus?”

“I wanted ta ask Him inta my heart last year, but I didn't get to 'cuz the the teacher didn't ask if anyone wanted to.” Jason buried his toes in the grass.

“Honey, asking Jesus into your heart is something you can do anywhere.” Lord, please save him.

“Really? Do you know Jesus, Willa?”

“Yes, Sweetie, I do, and I know He loves you. Did you know He died on the cross for your sins?”

“That's what the teacher said. An' she said that we'd go to hell because we're sinners. Willa, I don' wanna go ta hell. I wanna be with Jesus.” Jason's fingers clenched, squishing his forgotten cookie.

“Jesus will forgive your sins if you ask Him to, Jason. He'll live in your life and make you His special child. You just need to ask Him.” Please, Lord...

“How do I ask Him?”

“By praying.”

“Can I pray now?”

“Yes, you can,” Willa said, her eyes filling with tears.

Jason squeezed his eyes shut. “Jesus would You forgive my sins and live in my life, please? I wanna go ta heaven an' be with You. Amen.”

Jason looked at Willa, his eyes sparkling. “I'm His special child now, aren't I?”

Willa hugged him. “Yup. You're oh-so special, Honey! To Jesus and to me.”


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Lynda Schultz 04/10/08
A delightful story—it brought tears to my eyes. Well done.
Karen Wilber 04/10/08
I got interrupted reading this earlier, and I liked it so well that I came back to finish as soon as I could. I like your characters, they're charming, they sparkle. This is the start of a beautiful friendship.
Joanne Sher 04/12/08
Oh so lovely. Wonderful characterization and a compelling read. Made my heart warm up.
Laury Hubrich 04/12/08
I loved this story. It brought tears to my eyes, too. Great writing!
Laury
Dee Yoder 04/12/08
I can just imagine these two characters getting to know one another and sharing much more than cookies through the years. Wonderful characters!
Lyn Churchyard04/13/08
What a wonderful story. Cookies and milk AND Jesus. Should be more Willas in the world.
LauraLee Shaw04/13/08
This is a darling story. I felt like a fly on the wall. This was my favorite line:
“That's what the teacher said. An' she said that we'd go to hell because we're sinners. Willa, I don' wanna go ta hell. I wanna be with Jesus.” Jason's fingers clenched, squishing his forgotten cookie.
WEll done.
Sara Harricharan 04/14/08
Oh, too cute! (though that Willa sounds familiar...lol) I liked the character of Jason, he was real with a nice dose of manners. My favorite line was how he laughed saying that he thought 'his nana' was the only one who dunked her cookies in milk and talked with her mouth full. I felt as if I knew his Nana with just those few lines-really great writing-and chocolate chip cookies...cookies always make things better! ^_^
Beth LaBuff 04/14/08
This is so heart-warming. If this happened more often the world would be a better place. :)
Jan Ackerson 04/14/08
Very sweet story, and it made me hungry for milk and cookies.

A nitpick: I'm not sure how realistic the conversation is. In my experience, kids just aren't that precocious or wise.

But as archetypal characters, they both work very well, and this would make a super kid's story. Now, off to find the milk and cookies around here.
Loren T. Lowery04/16/08
A devine opportunity devined by a person with a gracious, loving heart. I could feel the sincerity of your character's feelings by your great choice of words.
Sheri Gordon04/16/08
Willa is great--you did a good job with her character.

I wanted a little more clue as to Jason's age. (I like to 'see' the story.) Some of his actions/dialogue seemed one age, and then he seemed to be older at other times.)

Love the use of milk and cookies--perfect for the topic.
Debbie Wistrom04/16/08
I loved Wila's hesitantcy and her determination. This flowed well and read as real.
Joshua Janoski04/16/08
I got all teary eyed from this. It reminded me of when I first asked Jesus into my heart as a young boy.

Willa is special. Her heart for the child was amazing. I loved how the two kept each other company.

My only complaint - I am trying to lose weight, and now I want cookies after reading this. :)
Betty Castleberry04/16/08
I love this sweet story. I'm glad they found each other, and I'm glad the little boy found Jesus. Nicely done.
Joanne Sher 04/18/08
Congratulations, Peejers, on placing 15th in your level and 24th overall with this piece. Great work!