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I like the two characters
in the story and was glad to see Papa Joe wasn't so bad after all. The end took me by surprise...a vet? Enjoyed that!
04/13/08
Oh, how I loved that cute twist at the end. Nicely done. I also loved many of your descriptions that put me in the middle of the story.
You have done an awsome job with atmosphere and characterization here.
I know that sequels are generally discouraged, but you leave so many unanswered questions here, not the least of which is whether daughter-in-law and grandchild are okay. I am also left wondering if Papa Joe had given up on faith for some reason, and it is rekindled in this story, or if he is just a sloppy bachelor. I am inclined to think the former, and that you used the disorder and unopened mail to show Papa Joe's isolation and loneliness rather than stating it outright.
Interesting that a father-in-law she had never met was the only person to whom she felt she could turn.
I think I have decided to like the humorous ending, taking it as a sign of Joe's renewed connection to the world, rather than an abrupt out-of-character quip. More?