The Official Writing Challenge
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I was waiting for Jesus to take the keys! Nice story.
This was fun. It would have been almost better without tacking on Mary seeing Jesus at the end and keeping the entire story in h**l.
I like the way this is poised and the dramatic effect.
I enjoyed seeing the exchange between Christ and Satan. Good characterizations.
Yes! I so wanted to shout Yes! when Jesus put his foot on Satan's neck and took from him the keys to death and Hell. Well done. I almost contemplated a story from this perspective but kinda knew you'd do it. And a lot better than I ever could. Introductin of Mary didn't quite jell. You might want to play with the ending. Nevertheless a great story.