The Official Writing Challenge
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04/10/08
Very imaginative and interesting story. Though it is true on a smaller scale, I only wish that it were true that exposure to the wisdom and experience of the grandparent's generation actually prevented the repetition of errors on a societal level. Good writing.
04/11/08
Creative and engaging. VERY unique take on the topic! I was extremely curious what was happening, and I was on the edge of my seat throughout. Good job!
04/11/08
This is intriguing to me also. I kept reading even though it is not my favorite genre. You hooked me. I loved the wisdom you had to write this. Creative, thought provoking and insightful.
04/12/08
An invigorating heart-pounder that has a thought-provoking message. Brilliant.
This is off the charts creative, not to mention riveting. Very well done.
How very, very clever. I really enjoyed this sci-fi piece. Excellent writing. Bravo!
A very different story and so well written. I could see the look of consternation and confusion on the faces of the police. Wisdom of the aged. I hope we never forget it. Well done Peter!
04/13/08
Hmmm...we may need that formula in our American churches soon...sci-fi with a message! Very good writing and characterization.
04/14/08
AWESOME! This should be a whole novel, yet you managed to create this whole sci-fi world in 750 words--extremely masterful. I'd read a full-length version of this in a heartbeat. One of my absolute faves this week.
I was intrigued from the first paragraph and rest of the story did not disappoint. Excellent!
Fast paced and thoroughly enjoyable, thanks for the ride.
04/16/08
Okay, this is another favorite of mine this week! I love the sci-fi twist and especially your authentic words explained by the key at the bottom. I felt bad for the granddaughter, but glad that her grandfather had the chance to say what he needed to. This was great-I wish there was more so I could see what happens next! Excellent writing! ^_^
Very 1984 George Orwellian. And, eeks! My time is almost up! : ) However, such writing as this points so well to the foolishness of such futuristic endeavors. At least I pray so.
I am a huge fan of what I like to call "bleak future sci-fi", and you did the genre right in my opinion. I would have never thought to create something so imaginative for a topic like grandparents.

I really enjoyed this unique take on the topic, and I hope that you continue to develop this short story into a novel, because I would love to read more. :)
04/17/08
Congratulations on your highly commended, Peter! So happy for you!
04/17/08
AND your Editor's Choice! Woo hoo!
04/17/08
***Congrats on your EC!*** (So glad this won!) ^_^
04/17/08
Congratulations on your EC, Peter. This is incredible. So scary, and too realistic. Fantastic job with the topic.
Way to go, Peter! Congratulations - Loren
04/17/08
Excellent. I read this a few days ago and thought it would be in the top 10.
04/18/08
What an amazing concept! What an amazing story! A brilliant illustration of the old saying: "One thing we learn from history is that man NEVER learns from history." Yet you successfully put it into a futuristic, neo-nazist political setting.
I hope all following generations learn from this.