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Those last two paragraphs are particularly good—her mother's hand on hers and her Grandmother in mind as she slips off to sleep. Very nice.
What a wonderful creative idea to pass onto her grandchild. Not only the discipline of not looking until the time appointed, but a reminder of the joys of heaven, and the purpose and love behind prayer. I loved it and want to keep this and think of creative ways to teach my own grandchildren. I don't know if this is fiction or true, but it has inspired me. Thanks.
Very nice - I caught a tense shift here and there, but this was a lovely piece. Touched my heart.
Great title and a tenderly written story.

I noticed several places where you've left out commans, especially when addressing a person in dialogue.

Very nice. The prayers of grandparents are treasures. I don't have a box but when she opened her box and read that line, I teared up remembering my own Grandma's prayers.
Congratulations, Marita, on placing 31st overall with this piece. Great job!