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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Grandparent(s) (04/03/08)

TITLE: Father Has No Father
By Gerald Shuler
04/03/08


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Lecia breathed in the wonderful aroma of the Buttercups that dotted the valley. She watched as her older brother made his way up the hillside to their temporary shepherd’s camp. Hopefully he would be able to clear up the mystery she had just discovered. After all, he was twelve years old and much wiser than she.

“The sheep are all safe, Lecia.” Seth sounded far older when he spoke of his responsibilities. “I am hungry. Is there any fruit left?”

Lecia quickly produced a mango for him. Seth settled against a tree and took a bite from the ripe, juicy orb. Something was bothering his sister. Taking another bite, he spoke as he chewed.

“What troubles you, Lecia? Did those travelers scare you?” He smiled at the thought of such small things filling his sister with fear. Silly girl.

“No, they were very kind. They only wanted to ask about Father and Mother.” She looked to the ground and shuffled her feet, trying to figure a way to present the mystery to him. He would probably just laugh and make her wish she hadn’t told him at all. “Seth,” she said, looking up at him. “The travelers said something that mystified me.”

Seth could tell that Lecia’s concern was genuine. He put the mango away to let her know she had his full attention. “Mystified?” He touched her hand, like he thought his father would do if she were with him. “Tell me what they said.”

“They were overjoyed when they discovered that Father and Mother were so near.” Her voice quivered slightly. “The woman said they had traveled a great distance to see her father’s father and mother.” Seth didn’t understand and Lecia saw it in his eyes. “Seth, they think our father and mother is their father’s father and mother.”

Now it dawned on Seth what the mystery was for his sister. “I understand, Lecia. Don’t worry about it. When we get home just ask mother about babies. She will explain your mystery.”

Lecia gave a look of disgust. “I have already talked with mother about THAT.” She gave a huff and a shrug of shoulders to show her brother how she felt. “You don’t see the mystery?”

“I guess not.” Seth picked up the mango and started to take another bite.

“The traveler’s father has a father and a mother.” She looked deeply to see if any understanding was making its way into her brother’s eyes. She saw no sign at all but noticed that he hadn’t bitten into the mango yet, so she continued. “Seth, where is the mother and father of our own mother and father? The mystery is too deep for me.”

Now Seth understood. Lecia knew nothing about their older brother, Cain. He was no longer mentioned in their family. These travelers must be of their brother’s household. No wonder they were searching for Father and Mother. No wonder Lecia was confused. At least now he knew how to answer her mystery. He laid the mango down again.

“Lecia,” he started. “We are… let’s just say we are unique.” He lifted her chin so she was looking directly at him. “Those other people were looking for something we will never have.”

“But…”

“No. Just listen.” Seth waited until she calmed a bit before continuing. “Our father never had a father. God created him from the red dirt of the earth. That is why God called him Adam. Then God took Mother from Father’s side as he slept. He called Mother Eve. So, Lecia, we have no father’s father or father’s mother. Do you understand what I am telling you?”

Lecia thought about what her wise brother was saying. She was young, but her wits were sharp. She finally grasped the reality of what Seth had told her. She jumped to her feet and began a joyful jig around the tree. The glow of excitement that filled her eyes actually startled her brother. He was prepared for any response but that one.

“What has brought you such joy about learning that your father and mother have no father or mother?”

“Oh, Seth… don’t you see what that means?” Lecia could not contain her excitement any longer. She grabbed Seth’s hand and pulled him to his feet. “That is the grandest news of all. It means God is our Grandparents.”

The revelation finally hit Seth. Hand in hand, the two danced and sang praises to their Grandfather.

The mango, though, never did get eaten.


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Joanne Sher 04/10/08
What a wonderful thought - and what wonderful characters you have created. Delightful. It took me quite a while to figure out who the characters were, but when I did, I was amazed at the creativity. Lovely.
Chely Roach04/11/08
Ditto what Joanne said. I was thinking, "Huh? Huh? Ohhhhhh. Wow, that's good."
Incredibly creative POV...Loved it.
Lollie Hofer 04/11/08
I have to agree with the others. I was trying to figure it all out but that made the story exciting and fun...trying to figure out what direction it would take. And what an exciting discovery when it all came together. Very intriguing story. WOWsers!!!!!!
Dee Yoder 04/12/08
Never thought of that before:the first generation had no grandparents but GOD. Awesome thought, isn't it? But then, He's our FATHER!
Kristen Hester04/12/08
What a creative story. And even though I was wondering what was happening, your writing is very clear and easy to understand. Superb job. Great characters. Bravo.
jodie banner04/12/08
What a great thought. You had me trying to solve your mystery the whole time.
Betty Castleberry04/13/08
I like the way you led me along, trying to figure out what the mystery was. This is very creative and a good read.
Beth LaBuff 04/14/08
Wow! Extremely creative and very well written!
Jan Ackerson 04/14/08
VERY creative! I enjoyed this immensely--was trying to work it out as I read it, and I really appreciated the aha! moment. Cool!
Lyn Churchyard04/16/08
I'm sitting here grinning like a fool. This was probably the most unique POV I've ever read. I loved this story. Well done Gerry, well done!
Marita Thelander 04/16/08
You always like to take things from a different POV, don't you Jerry? Good job, as always.
Carole Robishaw 04/16/08
Excellent piece, really makes you thing about the relationship they had.
Sara Harricharan 04/16/08
What a unique POV here! I was really getting into the story, when I discovered it was THE Seth-and that made the story all the more wonderful to read. I especially loved the character of his little sister and the mango-heehee, poor mango, it never did get eaten. ^_^ Nice job!
Debbie Wistrom04/16/08
This definitely belongs in masters, what comes after that--must by betting published. This was excellent!