The Official Writing Challenge
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03/14/08
Oh, so sad. There's something for us all to take away from this.
03/15/08
Your descriptions are sweetly done and you made the story very tender--it's a pity that you didn't end the story as sweetly too, although I can understand that you wanted to portray someone not making hay in time.
What a lesson to be learned. your descriptions are clear and detailed, esp loved this "much like the garden when a sudden September frost had taken it by surprise and had snuffed out budding hopes still on the vine." Keep up the good words.
You did a lovely job with the descriptions and parallel between the father/son relationship and the cycle of the garden.
I held out hope until the end, and was sad that you opted for the hard side of the lesson, but many of life's lessons are hard, and the writing was excellent.
03/17/08
What a lesson here! So sad, and yet, this is how life happens at times.