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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Make Hay While the Sun Shines" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (03/06/08)

TITLE: You Never Know
By william price
03/11/08


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A warm spring breeze whisked around freshly laundered blankets hanging from a clothesline.

It was a strange sight for Bradford Busby. He scratched his head as he got out of his green Impala.

One, two, three…eight blankets? What’s she up to now?

The Busbys lived in a moderately sized ranch style brick home in the suburbs. The newlywed husband noticed the back door was open. The aroma of freshly baked bread reeled him in to the kitchen. Bradford’s heavenly smile quickly disappeared.

“What are you doing, Darla?”

“Hello, Honey. Home already?”

Mrs. Bradford’s yellow cotton dress was covered in flour. One long powdered lock of her blonde hair escaped from her ponytail and tickled her mouth. She blew it out of the way.

“Well, right now I’m baking bread.”

Darla tried to blow her hair away from her mouth again and smile.

“I can see that,” Bradford remarked as he mentally counted a dozen loaves on the kitchen table. “It looks like enough bread for the entire neighborhood.”

“Well, you never know.”

Bradford blinked his eyes twice and shook his head. He could remember the initial time he heard her say that on their first date. A month later they were married. He hated to ask, but.

“Never know what?”

Darla was forced to blow the hair out of her mouth again.

“There might be a gas shortage and the price of bread will soar so high we can’t buy any because we have to use all of our money on gasoline.”

Darla took a deep breath, put her hands on her hips and smiled.

“And?” Bradford asked.

“And, we’ll have bread.”

“Did I miss a news bulletin today on the sudden rise in gas prices?”

“Oh yes, Bradford. It’s supposed to be to four, maybe five, dollars a gallon by August.”

Bradford tried to process that information.

“So, you made the bread today, because?”

“BECAUSE, Bradford.”

Darla was getting a little upset.

“I’m not the only one watching the news. Soon, everyone will realize the same thing, then, wham, nothing left in the stores to make bread with. It’s called, thinking ahead, BEING proactive, using my noggin.”

“Okay, I get the picture. So, how are we going to keep all this bread fresh for that dreaded shopping rush on yeast and flour.”

“Freeze it, Bradford. Duh? You’d think you were the blonde.”

The husband knew the size of the freezer above his small refrigerator, but he looked at it anyway.

“We have another freezer?”

“I just bought one from the Wife’s Home Spending Network. It’ll be here in the morning. When I saw your credit card on the desk I took it as a sign to go ahead and make the purchase.”

Bradford had to take a seat at the kitchen table.

“You used that credit card, eh? And they took it?”

“Yes. Was there a problem?”

Darla craned her neck to look out the kitchen window into the back yard.

“No, not yet,” Bradford mumbled.

“What was that, Honey?”

“Nothing. Hey, what about those blankets in the back? Don’t we have a drier?”

“Yes, Bradford, and it is full of sheets and pillow cases.”

“Nothing to do with the price of gas I hope?”

“No, smarty-pants, but, it might rain tomorrow.”

Bradford had to blink his eyes multiple times again.

“But?”

“But, what?” Darla demanded.

The husband sighed.

“Even if it does rain, why would we need eight sets of everything?”

“You never know…”

Darla was cut off when the telephone rang. Bradford answered it.

“No, I’m not watching the news. $5.00 a gallon. No kidding? You mean it just rose a $1.50 in two hours. Yes, that is incredible. Stores are preparing for what? Are you and Darla playing a trick on me? Okay, don’t get offended. Now what? Why do you want to spend the night? Your wife’s brother’s family too? Yes, I guess if the storm is going to be that big. We do live in a vale and have a basement. What to bring? Well, we have plenty of bread and blankets. Okay see you then. Bye.”

“Who was that, Honey?”

“Just my brother, we’re going to have company. I better get those sheets in. And, the next time you and God are praying, let me listen, okay?”

“One more thing, Bradford.”

“Yes, Darla.”

“I ordered a baby crib today too.”

Bradford’s eyes didn’t blink.

“Why?”

“You never know.”

Darla winked as she put another loaf of bread in the oven.


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Sally Hanan03/13/08
Ahahahaha. Too funny. There was I thinking she was an annoying fool and you go and twist your ending. Hahaha. Still laughing. :)
Peter Stone03/14/08
There I was thinking the wife was over reacting to every thread of news she got, when your ending went and showed she was completely on the ball.
Joanne Sher 03/15/08
SO cute and clever--you had me going throughout, thinking you were doing an "anti-proverb," right up until the end. I LOVE the ending (along with all the rest of it, of course!). Great characterization.
Shelley Ledfors 03/16/08
Oh this is just wonderful! VERY well done. So many lines I loved..."Wife's Home Spending Network" (LOL), and so many more. And then the ending was perfect. Really enjoyed this!
Jan Ackerson 03/16/08
Fantastic! So much dialogue, but perfectly written--that's so hard to do, but you pulled off because each line advanced the plot. Loved it.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/16/08
I absolutely loved your ditsy blonc, and her final "never know" was priceless.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/16/08
oops... blond
Lyn Churchyard03/16/08
This had me chuckling loudly as I read it. I was thinking she was definitely a goof ball, until the phone call. Oh and the ending was just great. So well written Sir Bill!
Betty Castleberry03/16/08
Whee! Your ending is a classic. I just love this. It's very well done. Thumbs up.
Loren T. Lowery03/17/08
I wqnder how many times this convesation is being repeated around the nation at this moment. And, aside from that, it has always struck me as odd, that no matter how unsuaual their reasoning, women are almost always proven right! Your article is a fine example as just a case in point.
Leigh MacKelvey03/17/08
This was just wonderful! I loved EVERY word. I especially liked the Wife Home Shopping Club. (Wife home, wife shops)
This is one of your most clever pieces. Loved, Loved, Loved it!
Catrina Bradley 03/17/08
I love it! Darla is just too cute, and her husband so patient. Great story. :)
Debbie Wistrom03/17/08
Hoped you aimed for cute this time becasue that is what I see. Perfect-all of it! Thanks for the smiles.
Joshua Janoski03/18/08
There isn't a single line of this story that didn't engage me and keep me laughing.

Your ending was perfect. Actually, this whole story is perfect.

This one is going on my favorites list. Thank you so much for sharing your gift of words and wit Sir William. :)
Karin Fiscaletti03/18/08
You had me in stitches! my kids were all asking what I was laughing at so I will let them read it too! Excellent story. I want to know if they had the baby!
Kristen Hester03/18/08
Oh, this is a fun one. I enjoy your wit. Great job on the topic. Thanks for sharing your gift.
jodie banner03/19/08
Bradford is in for an interesting life. I loved this story and I thought it was going somewhere else completely.Great twist at the end.
Sara Harricharan 03/19/08
ROFL! I love the light and fluffy air here. It is indeed a lovely floating piece and yes I did enjoy this very, very much! The ending was a real kicker! Darla is a great character and I love the line with next time she's praying to let him listen in. Very good! ^_^ After all, you never know...
Henry Clemmons03/19/08
How can so much dialogue be so visual? Great sense of humor, voice and timing. Enjoyed it.
Sara Harricharan 03/20/08
Nice piece of fluff, eh? lol!*** Congratulations on your EC!***
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/20/08
Congratulations! You never know!
Loren T. Lowery03/20/08
Way to go, William : ) This is nice to see. I really enjoyed this "light" "cute" insightful piece of "fluff"
Congratulations, Loren
Sheri Gordon03/20/08
Congratulations on your EC, William. Too cute. Love the wife's personality.
LauraLee Shaw03/20/08
Congrats on your EC! I'm so happy for you! This is brilliant!!!!
LauraLee Shaw03/20/08
Congrats on your EC! I'm so happy for you! This is brilliant!!!!
Leigh MacKelvey03/20/08
Congratulations! Sooo glad to see you place!
Edy T Johnson 03/20/08
Congratulations, SirWilliam! Your writing always entertains and your endings hold an O. Henry surprise twist that takes me by surprise everytime. Wish I knew how to do that (^&^) Thanks for another delightful entry.
Catrina Bradley 03/24/08
Congratulations, Bill!!!
Sharlyn Guthrie04/01/08
What a fun story! I love your portrayal of this husband and wife -especially the playfulness on the wife's part. What a great ending!