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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Make Hay While the Sun Shines" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (03/06/08)

TITLE: Behind The Barn
By Henry Clemmons
03/10/08


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Sky blue flies
  a kite
    of gold
Sparrows sing
  of lilac
    bloom
Sons smell leather
  tossed
    in glee
Old bike rusts behind the barn

Wrinkled hands
  work soft
    a broom
Puppies yelp
  inside
    a box
Bumble bees bounce
  roses
    pink
Old bike rusts behind the barn

Awake
Awake
My Schwinn of old
Arise
Arise
And pedal bold
You can
You can
Shake off the mold
Awake
Arise
You canít be old

Lonely leaf
  waves bye
    to green
Daylight shrinks
  in eveningís
    yawn
Windows close
  to battle
    chill
Old bike rusts behind the barn

Scarecrows pout
  out on the
    farm
Sweaters
  grow down
    childrenís arms
Sons move south
  on beaches
    warm
Old bike rusts behind the barn

Awake
Awake
My Schwinn of old
Arise
Arise
And pedal bold
You can
You can
Itís not too cold
Awake
Arise
You canít die old

Blankets white
  lie still
    in sleep
Barren trees
  no nests
    to keep
Echoed boys
  sleigh down
    hills deep
Old bike rusts behind the barn

Calendars thin
  one page
    left
Sons send gifts
  quietly
    wrapped
Silent Night hummed
  damp eyes
    close
Old bike rusts behind the barn

Awake
Awake
My Schwinn of old
Arise
Arise
And pedal bold
You can
You can
Shake off the cold
Awake
Arise
You canít die old

Sky blue flies
  a kite
    of gray
Robins sigh
  a song
    of bloom
Sons travel home
  dressed
    in black
Old bikeís gone behind the barn

Wrinkled hands
  clasped stiff
    on breast
Church suit
  starched
    inside pine box
Pink blooms
  wilt
    in watered vase
Old bikeís gone behind the barn

Awake
Awake
My Schwinn of old
Arise
Arise
And pedal bold
You can
You can
In Heavenís fold
Awake
Arise
You wonít be old


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Verna Cole Mitchell 03/13/08
This is breathtakingly beautiful. I have such a lump in my throat. What a wonderful story you've told through the sharp imagery.
Jan Ackerson 03/14/08
I'm pretty sure I know who wrote this, and you are rapidly becoming one of my very favorite FW poets. Just perfection--the meter, the repetition, the imagery, the pacing--absolutely wonderful. And some day you'll have to tell me how you do the little indents. I'm sure it's an html code, but I've never been able to figure it out.

Did I mention that I LOVE this poem? I LOVE it!
Debbie Wistrom03/15/08
I wanted this to go on, but understand the season must carry on. I'm becoming more of a fan of poetry and this is a favorite. Thanks!
Dianne Janak03/16/08
This poem was not short of masterful. The idea, the creation, the buildup, the wisdom, the climax, the lesson, and the love put in this makes it a keeper for me. Thanks for this gift.
Chely Roach03/16/08
This was absolutely beautiful...I loved it.
Shelley Ledfors 03/16/08
I am in awe. This is absolutely fabulous! Thank you for sharing your gift.
Paula Titus 03/16/08
Absolutely beautiful, haunting, captivating.
Sally Hanan03/16/08
I agree with Jan, you are one incredible poet. I loved your White Blurs last week, and I love this. You put so much thought into your work and your conscientiousness pays off.
Joanne Sher 03/18/08
Just beautiful. Very, VERY good. Wow.
Lyn Churchyard03/18/08
I'm not usually a poetry person - I mean, I like poetry, but this was unbelievably good. There is an urgency about it in the repetitive words. Fantastic! Well done!
Joshua Janoski03/18/08
Why are you only in advanced and not masters yet?

This poem was awesome! I don't know anything about writing poetry, and I don't read much of it either, but this poem kept me till the very end. You definitely have an amazing gift in this area.

Keep on writing great poetry! :)
Leigh MacKelvey03/19/08
Now THIS is a poem! Wow! The talent is in the the clever technique you've used in in descriptions such as sky blue flies; work soft; roses pink; petal bold; blankets white and so on. It makes this poetry instead of prose. I loved every line and the whole concpet. Hope this palces high.
Loren T. Lowery03/19/08
I seldome read poetry, or understand it, but you made reading this a joy and understanding it a pleasure. Superb job.
Sara Harricharan 03/19/08
Oh you are GOOD! This is one of your best ones, I think! At any rate, it's my favorite of yours so far! The free-flowing tone and the way it was structured and especially the repeating verse with a change at every end, that was really good! Great job! ^_^
Leigh MacKelvey03/20/08
Hi there! Just wanted to chat with you about your poem, but couldn't leave a PM. Please give me a shout at leighmackelvey@comcast.net!
Karen Wilber 07/07/08
Wow. I missed this the first time around and caught it for Jan's free verse class. I love the images in this "calendars thin", "evening's yawn" (there's so many).
Glynis Becker 07/07/08
Powerful and beautiful. I love the rhythm and the descriptive flow. Amazing!
Beth LaBuff 07/08/08
This is beautiful and so rich with everything that poetry is... Awesome writing!
Catrina Bradley 07/08/08
Applause applause!!! I only thought to check the topic after I read this heart-wrenching piece of beauty, and it is perfectly spot on.
Betsy Markman08/22/08
Simply gorgeous!