The Official Writing Challenge
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You did a great job in your excellent poem in revealing how careless and shallow we can be regarding the really important matters of living our life for God. I loved your conclusion.
03/15/08
The last line made me think, Ouch--for her, for everyone. Very realistic, unfortunately. Great job with the topic. I'm not a poet, but this was nice & easy to read too!
03/16/08
Loved this poetic romp through life! I thought for a minute that the MC had pulled himself/herself up and was going to do THINGS NOW!; however, right back in the old routine...."no church cleaning tonight...I'm busy." (*.*)! Delightful and very thought provoking! Great for this week's topic!
03/16/08
I like this, too. Your examples could have been from anyones experience, and the poetry worked well and read easily. Good job.
03/17/08
Ooh, ouch! This little poem really hits home. I love the wrap up stanza, and the last stanza is perfect. Nicely done on this topic.