The Official Writing Challenge
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I like the significance of your title and the story that is told through your poem. You have an excellent message in your words.
Good expression of the topic. The use of repetition was very effective, as was using a different rhyme scheme for God's comments.
You have carefully used eight syllables in each line. What will further enhance your poetry, is using consistency of meter, which syllables are stressed, and which are not, which will improve the flow of the poem, especially when read aloud.